Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

IN THIS NEOTERIC ERA , BEST WAY TO ALLOTE MORE HOMES IN MEGA CITES FOR CONSTRUCTION OF TALL APARTMENT BLOCKS.I STEADFAST AGREE WITH IS PERSPECTIVE THAT , PROVIDE HOMES AS BUILD TALL APARTMENTS IN MEGA CITIES.

FIRST AND FORE MOST COMPELLING REASON OF MY AGREEMENT THAT, BUILD TALL APARTMENT IS BENIFICIAL FOR ENVIRONMENT. TO EXPLICATE THAT, IF GOVERNMENT PROVIDE TALL APARTMNT IT LEADS TO MORE FACILITIES AMONG THE PEOPLE BECAUSE FOR APARTMENT CONSTRUCTION LAND AREA REQUIRED LESS , FOR EXAMPLE , POLICY MAKER BUID APARTMENT WITH REMOVEL OF OTHER HOSES THERE COULD BE BUILD GARDEN SHOPING MALLS WHICH IS BENIFICAL FOR PEOPLE AS WELL AS ECONOMY.HENCEFORTH, BUILD TALL APARTMENT LEADS ECONOMICAL GROWTH.

SECOND PARAMOUNT BREASON OF MY AGREEMENT THAT , TALL APARTMENTS CAN SAVE A LIFE IN ENDENGER SITUATION. TO ELABORATE IT , IF MEGA CITIES ARE SITUATED NEAR THE REVER OR OCEAN THAT TIME BY HELP OF STRONG TALL BUILDINGS AND APARTMENTS INDIVIDUALS COULD BE SAVE THEIR LIVE . FOR EXAMPLE , RECENTLLY IN BE SIDE OF INDIA NEPAL SUFFERING FROM TSUNAMI AND WATER ATTACK IN THAT TIME GROUND LEVELED HOUSES AND PEOPLE WAS DRAWN IN WATER , THAT TIME MULTIPLE INDIVIDUALS USED TALL APARTMENTS AND MOVED ON HIGHTED FLORES IN APARTMENTS FROM WATER LAVEL FOR TO SAVE THEIR LIFE.HENCE SOME TIME TALL BUILDINGS AND APARTMENT COULD SAVE HUMAN'S LIFE.

CONCLUSIVELY , I STEADFASTLY AGREE WITH THIS PERSPECTIVE THAT , COMMUNITIES ALLOTE TALL APARTMENTS IT LEADS TO ECONOMICAL GROWTH WITH BETER LIFE STYLE AND PROVIDE MORE FACILITIES AMONG THE PEOPLE AS WELL AS IT CAN SAVE LIFE IN SOME CRITICAL SITUATIONS.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The candidate addresses the prompt by clearly stating their position in agreement with the statement that building tall apartment blocks is the best way to provide enough homes in large cities. The response includes relevant main ideas, such as environmental benefits, land efficiency, and safety during disasters like tsunamis. However, the development of these ideas is frequently hindered by dense, unclear phrasing and non-standard examples, such as the claim about India and Nepal experiencing tsunamis. While all parts of the task are addressed, the arguments are limited and lack sophisticated extension due to language barriers. Therefore, this performance aligns best with the Band 5 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is structured into distinct paragraphs, including an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, fulfilling the basic requirement of paragraphing. However, the organization suffers from a lack of clear overall progression. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repeatedly, such as 'TO EXPLICATE THAT' and 'SECOND PARAMOUNT BREASON', which often feel mechanical rather than natural. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the transitions between sentences can be abrupt, making the logical flow difficult to follow in places. This corresponds closely to the Band 5 descriptors for cohesion and paragraphing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and heavily repetitive, featuring frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'NEOTERIC', 'ALLOTE', 'BENIFICIAL', 'HOSES', and 'LAVEL'. While the writer attempts to use less common academic lexical items, these attempts often result in unnatural collocations or misuse, such as 'WATER ATTACK' and 'HIGHTED FLORES'. These lexical inaccuracies and noticeable spelling errors cause some difficulty for the reader and impede the smooth delivery of ideas, placing the response firmly in the Band 5 category.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is severely restricted. The student attempts complex structures, but these attempts are almost entirely faulty, characterized by missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and pervasive errors in subject-verb agreement, such as 'BUILD TALL APARTMENT IS BENIFICIAL' and 'PEOPLE WAS DRAWN IN WATER'. Punctuation is also problematic, with spaces misplaced before commas and periods throughout the text. Because errors are very frequent and can cause considerable difficulty for the reader, this writing reflects the Band 4 descriptor profile.

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