Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Introduction:I think agree the large cities build the apartment blocks is provided many facilities and person space but I dis agree some point that is lack of environment can not feeling to touch the nature because the apartment is to tall can't see tha nature in touch
Body paragraph 1: the large cities is to build a apartment is blocks some time is good for people don't another person involved the privacy and don't interrupt your life and do anything in your life can you do there.that is good because today the people are more interfere you life involved your personal space I think the some reason I agree to then the apartment of the blocks.
Body paragraph 2: I agree some point but even I disagree in reason the person cut off the environment and nature because the tall apartment blocks you can see the garden but not your owner house of this graden sometimes your feeling not very well not another apartment to look here.and something you talking to another person your feeling not well but another is not here.but the major point of disagreement is your can't feel the nature and environment.
Conclusion: in some point I strongly agree the build tall apartment blocks e.g.privcy ,personal life and othe things.but some point I am disagree for build the apartment blocks e.g. you can't feel the nature.lack environment and other things you can not do this your feeling not well not another apartment person can help you you are a discount people.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the prompt regarding whether tall apartment blocks are the best way to provide housing in large cities, touching upon aspects such as personal space, privacy, and the lack of connection to nature. However, the position is not always clear and ideas are repetitious and severely under-developed. For instance, the student states in the introduction 'I think agree the large cities build the apartment blocks is provided many facilities' but then immediately mentions the drawback of lacking environmental connection. The development of these ideas remains limited and somewhat confusing throughout the body paragraphs, aligning closely with the Band 5 descriptor where the task is addressed only partially and ideas are limited and under-developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks clear logical organisation and progression. Although there are identifiable paragraphs corresponding to an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, the internal structure of each paragraph is disjointed and confusing. For instance, Body paragraph 1 jumps abruptly between privacy and general life interruptions without smooth transitional phrases. Cohesive devices are generally inadequate or incorrectly used, as seen in phrases like 'the large cities is to build a apartment is blocks some time is good'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the train of thought. This matches the characteristics of Band 4, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently and progression is lacking.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on words like 'apartment', 'blocks', 'nature', and 'feeling'. There are severe limitations in lexical range, and numerous word-choice errors occur, such as 'discount people' or 'owner house of this graden'. Furthermore, word formation and spelling errors ('privcy', 'dis agree') are common. The range of vocabulary is barely adequate to communicate simple ideas and frequently causes strain and confusion for the reader, fitting the Band 4 descriptor where basic, repetitive vocabulary and errors severely restrict communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting almost entirely of poorly constructed simple or attempted complex sentences that are heavily flawed. Almost every sentence contains major grammatical errors, incorrect verb forms, or missing punctuation, such as 'I think agree the large cities build the apartment blocks is provided many facilities'. There is a complete lack of error-free sentences, and the frequent errors frequently distort meaning and create significant difficulty for the reader. This performance aligns squarely with the Band 4 descriptor for grammatical range and accuracy.
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