Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

A few citizens belive that the incresing number of humna popluation according the good way to provide enough living space in heritage cities is to build tall apartment blocks. Because in apartment building structure is more then home avalable at the in small areas.

Nowdays the retaing market to much hight compare to the eariler time. They have so many citizens are transfer that home into the heritage cities due to the high emploment ration and modern life. In the other side cities not suffient spce to allocate them for living. that is the reason according the apartment buliding structure is really help-ful at that time. for example one 3 BHK home occupide so many space if that convert into a one apartment then that space use to make more than 35 homes. so that way that is really good for people to living there.

In the otther side that is also help ful for financial conditions wise. every small or middel man are esaily get the new home in cities. and that also provide diffrent kind of fesalities. that you do not see at the personal home. for example the some spartment provide diffrent kind of features like the graden and gym and swimming pool, also include the gaming area for childer. that you do not build and create in the another home. if you bhuil it. that cost is to much comapre to the apartment one.

In conclusion, build the tall apartment is really help-ful and also the good way to provide enough home in heritage cities. that also give to many diffrent features that normal home not give us.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the prompt regarding whether building tall apartment blocks is the best way to provide enough homes in large cities. The writer takes a clear position in favour of tall apartments, citing economic efficiency and shared facilities like gyms and swimming pools. However, the development of ideas is limited and hampered by expression issues. For instance, the example comparing a 3 BHK home to an apartment that houses 35 homes attempts to support the argument, but the expression is vague and lacks precise elaboration. While the prompt is addressed and a position is maintained throughout, the ideas remain underdeveloped and somewhat repetitive. This aligns best with the Band 5 descriptors, where the task is addressed, but the position is not always clearly articulated and ideas are limited.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into four paragraphs, showing a basic structure including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by poor cohesion and referencing. Phrases like 'Nowdays the retaing market' and 'In the other side' indicate awkward transitions and mechanical use of cohesive devices. Pronoun referencing is also weak, such as in 'if that convert into a one apartment then that space use', making it difficult to follow the logical flow of ideas. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion is faulty. This corresponds to the Band 5 descriptor, where there is some organisation, but overall progression is unclear and cohesive devices are inadequate or inaccurate.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

Lexical resource is a notable weak point in this response. The vocabulary is basic, repetitive, and plagued by severe spelling and word-choice errors that frequently impede communication. Examples of non-standard forms include 'belive', 'incresing', 'humna', 'popluation', 'retaing', 'hight', 'emploment', 'ration', 'suffient', 'spce', 'help-ful', 'occupide', 'fesalities', 'spartment', and 'bhuil'. The student attempts to use less common words such as 'facilities' and 'employment', but misspells them consistently. The range of vocabulary is limited and strained, fitting the Band 4 descriptor where basic, repetitive vocabulary and numerous errors impede the reading process and cause strain.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that are heavily flawed. The text contains frequent, dense errors in punctuation, tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Examples include 'Because in apartment building structure is more then home avalable at the in small areas' and 'every small or middel man are esaily get the new home'. Clauses are frequently disjointed, and prepositions are misused ('conditions wise'). Because errors are pervasive across almost every sentence and frequently distort meaning or cause difficulty for the reader, this performance matches the Band 4 descriptor.

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