Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Home is the main area where everyone feel calm, comfortable and feel more relaxing. In big cities there is enough space for living so, some believes that big apartments units in large cities provide sufficient space to resident and that is the better way. I strongly agree of this statement because by using a specific area build a multiple flats and different famlies are staying in same building.

To commence with, in metropolis in which great hustle and bustle because of numerious industries, bumper to bumper traffic, in addition to, various number of universisties, colleges and schools resultantly, limited space to habitate. For instance, bulild a residential towers provide multiple home faacilities for those people who are struggled for their own homes because of constructing independent home in large metropolitan area is really challanging.

Moreover, various families belong to different culture, customs as well as relgion living in same apartment in this way thay can exchange their values moreover, in emergency situations they can help to each other without any differences. For example, every religion have own occassion like diwali, eid, christmis and holi so on in flats all are residents celebrates togather without any barrier, in addition to partcipates other special moments to make more joy or cheerful.

To conclude that, through multi blocks large apartments giving home resident in bigcities is the bestest way, to met the residential challangings. So

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response takes a clear position in agreement with the prompt and presents some relevant ideas concerning residential space and social cohesion. However, the task is under the 232-word minimum length requirement, having only 232 words, which directly impacts the depth of idea development. While the writer touches on population density and community living, the arguments remain somewhat repetitive and under-developed due to the length constraints. For instance, the discussion on cultural celebrations in flats is relevant but lacks robust elaboration. Consequently, this prevents the response from achieving a higher score. To improve, ensure you fully develop each body paragraph with comprehensive explanations and concrete examples while strictly meeting the minimum word count of 250 words.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays a basic overall organization with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a brief concluding sentence. However, the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by poor cohesive referencing and mechanical linking phrases. For example, expressions like 'To commence with' and 'Moreover' are used, but sentences within paragraphs often lack smooth transitions, as seen in the run-on structure of '...in metropolis in which great hustle and bustle because of numerious industries...'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas is hindered by repetitive phrasing and abrupt shifts. Referencing words are occasionally ambiguous, making it difficult to follow the logical flow at times. To reach a higher band, focus on using cohesive devices more naturally and ensure that each sentence links logically to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors that occasionally strain comprehension. Examples of lexical errors include 'residente' or 'resident', 'habitate', 'faacilities', 'challanging', 'tahgy', and the superlative form 'bestest'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'metropolis', 'hustle and bustle', and 'bumper to bumper traffic', but these are often undermined by inaccurate collocation or grammatical form. The range of vocabulary is minimally adequate for the task, but lacks the precision required for higher bands. To improve, pay closer attention to word formation, spelling conventions, and avoid overusing informal or incorrect superlatives like 'bestest'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammatical structure is heavily limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences and overly long, error-ridden complex attempts. The text suffers from frequent grammatical errors, such as missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and faulty subject-verb agreement, as seen in 'everyone feel calm', 'some believes', and 'every religion have own occassion'. Punctuation is also problematic, particularly with sentence boundaries, leading to run-on sentences that lack proper coordination or subordination. While the writer attempts complex structures, these constructions are almost always faulty and impede the fluency of the text. To achieve a higher score, the student needs to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and correctly using subordinate clauses.

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