Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
According to some people, building high rise apartmants is the best way to provide population enough homes in large cities. I totally agree to this viewpoint.
At first, today, overpopulation is one of the main problems in large cities. Most people who live in a countryside are move in cities because of lack of different features. For example, healthcare centres, in rural areas have a different diseas and also there are lots of older people, so, `there has a need for medicines. To tackle this, government should build this kind of features in rural areas, so, I think people don't need to move in cities.
Secondly, high rise buildings can contain lots of people rather than bungalows and also these are more convenient and easy to keep clean, near to the public transports, shops. There are many opportunities for education and career.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
Javob juda qisqa bo'lib, majburiy 250 so'zlik minimumga nisbatan atigi 142 so'zni o'z ichiga oladi. Bu Topshiriq bajarilishi (Task Achievement) bo'yicha og'ir jarimaga olib keladi, chunki bunday qisqa matnda topshiriq talablarini to'liq qanoatlantirib bo'lmaydi. Talaba aniq pozitsiyani bayon qilgan bo'lsa-da ("I totally agree to this viewpoint"), g'oyalarning rivojlanishi minimal va parchalanib ketgan. Qolaversa, asosiy xatboshilar katta shaharlarda yetarli uy-joy bilan ta'minlash uchun baland turar-joy binolari eng yaxshi yo'l ekanligi haqidagi asosiy savolga to'g'ridan-to'g'ri va izchil murojaat qilish o'rniga, qishloq joylardagi sog'liqni saqlash va qulayliklarni muhokama qilishga o'tib ketgan. Natijada, topshiriq qisman bajarilgan bo'lib, Band 4.0 descriptoriga eng yaxshi mos keladi.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
Inshoda javobni tuzish uchun "At first" va "Secondly" kabi asosiy yo'naltiruvchi qurilmalardan foydalanilgan, biroq umumiy tashkil etilishida aniq mantiqiy rivojlanish yo'q. Xatboshilarga ajratish zaif; birinchi asosiy xatboshi shahar aholisining haddan tashqari ko'payishidan qishloq sog'lig'ini saqlash va infratuzilma muammolariga keskin o'tib, keyin biroz topshiriq mavzusiga qaytadi. Havola qilish ba'zida noaniq, ayniqsa ikkinchi xatboshidagi "these" kabi olmoshlar bilan, bu esa argumentlar oqimini kuzatishni qiyinlashtiradi. Ma'lumotlar va g'oyalar insho davomida to'liq izchil tarzda tartibga solinmagan, bu Band 4.0 xususiyatlarini aks ettiradi, garchi asosiy xatboshi chegaralari qo'yilishiga harakat qilingan bo'lsa ham.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Ishlatilgan lug'at boyligi sodda va takrorlanuvchi bo'lib, apartments uchun "apartmants", population uchun "population", disease uchun "diseas" kabi tez-tez uchraydigan so'z tanlash va imlo xatolarini o'z ichiga oladi. Doirasi cheklangan va mo'ljallangan xabarni yetkazish uchun zo'rg'a yetarli, "lack of different features" va "build this kind of features" kabi ifodalar aniqlik va tabiiy birikmaga ega emas. Muallif haddan tashqari ko'p aholi va jamoat transporti kabi kamroq uchraydigan mavzularni kiritishga harakat qilsa-da, leksik xatolar va cheklangan lug'at diapazoni qat'iy ravishda Band 4.0 darajasiga ishora qiladi.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Insho sodda va nuqsonli murakkab gaplarga tayanib, gap tuzilmalarining juda cheklangan diapazonini namoyish etadi. Tushunishga tez-tez xalaqit beradigan grammatik xatolar mavjud, masalan, "Most people who live in a countryside are move in cities", "there has a need for medicines" va "people don't need to move in cities". Tinish belgilari va fe'l zamonlarini nazorat qilish ham matn davomida turg'un emas. Xatolar tez-tez uchrab turgani va ba'zida mo'ljallangan ma'noni buzib ko'rsatgani sababli, grammatik ko'rsatkich to'g'ridan-to'g'ri Band 4.0 darajasida turibdi.
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