Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
It seem this to providing the more houses in large cities to build tall apartment blocks.They have to extent the area are the house or they want to have that king of land are strong enough to build the tall apartment.
To begin with the apartments if should make this king of tall building ,there are some problem like flying plane or any kind of natural disaster come than the whole apartment fall down it's make lot's peoples loss there life.
One of the best point that peoples want to spends there life in house not in the apartment because in apartment there varies kind of peoples are stay there . If you build tall apartment block can very careful about build quality product to provide enough homes.
In my opinion to build tall apartment blocks are greats to have me homes for the peoples they want to live in certain area because they spend childhood there and they do not want leave that place now a years the populations are growing up very fast so some people does not have there homes where they want , that's why to build tall apartment blocks
In conclusion,the shortage of houses the government want to clear rural area to build tall apartment for the peoples who want to live there and also government have to build at-least 7 to 10 floors blocks for there citizen.The tall apartment place have more peoples in less area ,also they can build the penthouse on the top.If the approved this king of project that maybe help a large amount of peoples.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the prompt regarding whether building tall apartment blocks is the best solution for housing in large cities. The writer presents a stance that supports tall apartment blocks to accommodate growing populations and preserve childhood memories. However, the ideas are often underdeveloped, repetitive, and lack clear progression. For instance, points regarding natural disasters or building safety are introduced abruptly without sufficient elaboration or connection to the main argument. The position is discernible in places, but overall development is limited, which aligns with the requirements for a Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response shows some basic organisation with paragraph breaks, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are either missing, inadequate, or used inaccurately, as seen in phrases like 'To begin with the apartments if should make this king of tall building ,there are some problem'. Referencing is frequently unclear, and sentences often run together without logical transitions, making the text difficult to follow at times. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal paragraph coherence is weak. These features place the response firmly at Band 4.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors that strain the reader's understanding. Examples include 'king of land', 'peoples loss there life', and 'build quality product'. While the student attempts to use some less common words like 'population', 'natural disaster', and 'penthouse', inaccurate word forms and collocations are prevalent throughout the text. Spelling errors also occur ('there' instead of 'their'). This meets the descriptors for Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting predominantly of faulty attempts at complex structures. There are frequent, heavy errors in basic grammar, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure, such as 'It seem this to providing the more houses' and 'If the approved this king of project that maybe help a large amount of peoples.' Punctuation and phrasing errors are pervasive and frequently distort the intended meaning, which corresponds to a Band 4 performance.
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