Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Nowadyas many people prefer to leaving in buildings. Becase of the trend. People are attracted to the new facilities. In addition, some people stay in enough homes. I was totally agree with statment because the people have prefer enough home. I was dissuss in the further paragraph.

Firstly, people have enough home is the best way some people attract with large building it was the wrong way because they are manufactured their building on the poor people place. Moreover, the enough homes was the greatful to the leaving. They have small family or some people have a big family they are dose not matter because they are stay on the happy family. The enough homes in the many row and colums with the same house and same color it was the amazing look describe. Furthermore, in the enough homes people can there own place to relaxing. They have a not tention to public have a uppar and lower sattle in the one building, in that envirnment they can feel relaxing.

Secondly, the people who leaving in a enogh home they can celebrate the all festivals better than the building home. They can spend a time to their neighbour and share some thinks. They can meet at a night after compleing their work and they can share some thoughts and share their talking to the experiance of whole day, that was the amzing part to share something. In addtion, people feel relaxing because they have a own home, dose not matter it was the small or big. Futhermore, in the buildings owner can provide 2 or 3 BHK, but our own house we can create own ideas to the build house.

In counclusion, the enogh homes is the better than larger cities building because people can feel relaxing and share information about thair house is the best feeling

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position agreeing with the statement, though the argument is heavily obscured by language issues. The writer attempts to contrast tall buildings with individual homes, mentioning aspects like community, family space, and lifestyle. However, the ideas are underdeveloped and repetitive, often drifting into unclear reasoning regarding poor people places and row houses. While the writer attempts to support the position, the lack of coherent elaboration restricts the development of ideas. Consequently, the performance aligns with the Band 4 descriptors, where the response tackles the task in a very limited and repetitive manner.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is divided into paragraphs, which shows a basic awareness of structure. However, the logical progression is severely disrupted by confusing sentences and poor referencing. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as the abrupt transitions using 'Nowadyas', 'Becase', and 'Futhermore'. Pronoun referencing is frequently unclear, leaving the reader struggling to connect ideas between sentences. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is lacking, as sentences jump between disparate thoughts about family, housing color, and festivals. This level of organisation and mechanical cohesion corresponds directly to the Band 4 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used throughout the essay is basic, repetitive, and often inaccurate. The writer relies heavily on simple terms like 'home', 'people', 'building', and 'family', while attempts at less common vocabulary result in severe errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'leaving in buildings', 'enough home', 'greatful to the leaving', and 'uppar and lower sattle'. Spelling mistakes are frequent, including 'Nowadyas', 'Becase', 'dissuss', 'dissuss', 'manufactured', 'colums', 'tention', 'envirnment', 'compleing', and 'counclusion'. These persistent errors and limited resource place the lexical performance firmly at Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and heavily flawed sentence structures. Almost every sentence contains major grammatical errors, including tense confusion ('I was totally agree', 'I was dissuss'), missing articles, incorrect verb forms ('people have prefer', 'they are dose not matter'), and faulty subordination. Punctuation is also problematic, leading to run-on structures and sentence fragments. Due to the high frequency of grammatical errors that constantly strain meaning and distort the intended message, the response satisfies the criteria for Band 4.

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