Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Population is increasing day by day and the number of people also migrating toward cities for better opportunities and the area for housing is decreasing, so the best way to provide enough homes for people in large cities to build a tall apartment with many blocks and I am agree to some extent to slove the problems for housing.

Over population and migration of people from rural areas to toward cities is increasing day by day, so there is a greater problem for the public of housing. So to build a house for each and every familly it will require a large area and will lead to housing problem so it is neccessary to build high building and make different apartments in it so no one will be left without home and will also contribute to better country economy. For example I am living in Mingora city and there is a great difficulties for housing so a large number of tall apartments has made here to solve the problem.

In contrast, there is also some negative aspects regarding housing in one apartment. The most important problem is pollution because if many families living in one apartment so there will be a great deal about sanitation and a large number of diseases will be spread. For example typhoid fever which is caused due to orofeccal rout will be prominent among the public. Water distribution among different apartments will be another problem.

In conclusion, there is some positive aspects of building a tall apartment sand will solve the problem of housing and many people will migrate towards the cities. In regard to positive aspects there is also some negative aspects like pollution, sanitation and many more.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing whether building tall apartment blocks is the best solution to urban housing shortages, taking a partial stance. While the writer touches upon both advantages, such as accommodating the growing population and boosting the economy, and drawbacks like pollution and sanitation issues, the development of these ideas remains somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the point regarding population increase is restated multiple times without much new extension. Examples are provided, such as mentioning Mingora city and typhoid fever, which helps support the arguments. However, the overall position could be articulated with greater clarity and depth to reach higher bands. Because the response meets the length requirement, the evaluation focuses strictly on the content and task coverage provided.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays some basic organization with clear paragraph breaks separating the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. However, the overall progression of ideas is hindered by repetitive phrasing and a lack of smooth transitions between sentences. Cohesive devices are used, but they tend to be basic and repetitive, such as excessive reliance on 'so' and 'and'. For example, sentences often chain multiple clauses together with coordinating conjunctions rather than utilizing sophisticated referencing or substitution. Paragraphing is attempted, though the final conclusion is very brief and abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, which requires the reader to work harder to follow the logical flow of arguments.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate to convey basic ideas, but it lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary items, such as 'sanitation', 'migration', and 'distribution', but there are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as writing 'soid' instead of 'said' or struggling with 'orofeccal rout' (fecal-oral route). Spelling and word formation errors, such as 'slove' and 'familly', occur throughout the text and cause some distraction for the reader, though they rarely completely impede communication. To improve, the student needs to expand their range of functional academic vocabulary and pay closer attention to accurate word forms and spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The text relies heavily on a mix of simple and long, run-on coordinate sentences joined by conjunctions like 'and' and 'so', rather than a controlled variety of complex grammatical structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly regarding subject-verb agreement, article use, and prepositions, such as 'to build a tall apartment with many blocks and I am agree to some extent to slove the problems' and 'if many families living in one apartment so there will be a great deal'. Punctuation is also weak, with long sentences lacking proper internal punctuation or full stops. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the text from achieving a higher band score.

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