Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The best way to provide homes in the developed cities is to build tall apartment blocks.I totally agree with this statement and both the reasons are going to discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.
To commence with, there are plethora of rationales why the apartments are best way to give homes to the citizens because it become a source of income, it increases the economy of the city.to cite an example there is land and a family build a home on that place it is not making profit as well as it is not helping the city to increase the economy. on the other hand if there is a building with apartments the lot of people can live there and the building will earn profit and increase the economy.
moving ahead with remaining details, If the apartments are build then there will be more place to live and more people get homes to live and migrate from countryside areas to developed cities for more facilities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 250 words, containing only 164 words. Consequently, the development of ideas is severely limited and remains under-developed. While the student does state a clear position at the beginning ('I totally agree with this statement'), the reasons provided are extremely brief and lack sufficient extension or relevant supporting examples. The mention of economic benefits is superficial, noting only that 'a building with apartments the lot of people can live there and the building will earn profit'. Due to the significant under-length penalty and lack of adequate support, the response aligns with a Band 4.0 descriptor for Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is divided into short paragraphs, but overall organization is disjointed. The introduction uses a memorized template phrase ('both the reasons are going to discussed in the upcoming paragraphs') which is not fully integrated. Cohesive devices are minimal or inaccurate, such as 'moving ahead with remaining details,' which sounds unnatural and unacademic. Paragraphing is attempted, but the body paragraphs are extremely brief and lack clear internal logical progression, resulting in an overall choppy structure that fits Band 4.0 characteristics.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a basic vocabulary with several noticeable errors. Words and phrases such as 'plethora of rationales' show an attempt to use less common vocabulary, but they are often misused or awkwardly collocated, as seen in 'the apartments are best way to give homes' and 'family build a home on that place'. Repetition of basic terms like 'homes,' 'city,' and 'economy' is prevalent. Spelling and word choice errors occur frequently, though communication is generally maintained, placing the lexicon at a Band 5.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writing exhibits a limited range of sentence structures, with heavy reliance on simple or faultily constructed complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('if there is land', 'if there is a building'), subject-verb agreement issues ('the apartments are build', 'more people get homes'), and run-on structures ('...increase the economy.to cite an example...'). Punctuation and capitalization errors are also noticeable throughout the text. These frequent errors correspond to a Band 4.5 or 5.0, comfortably fitting the Band 5.0 descriptors for limited structures and frequent errors.
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