Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The good plan to give more sheilters in big cities to counstrust tall apartment blocks is the good idea i am agree with this statement .

To began with, everybody know that population of the world are increase day by day .if poulation increase then they also need home or a place to live . to explain it, every body need a place or sheilter of spend their life we call that place home . To cite an example The New York Time publish a artical in 2026 is that every 50 person out of 100 they wnt to live in cities but there is no enough space . Thus, every need their house in large cities but there is no enough space .

Furthermore, the artictat invent the new idea to use a certunt place to create more house . to elaborate it, then they build big and tall apartment blocks it is very use full it can solve very much problems and made it for good life styles . For instance BBC print the news in the paper they write that now 1000 or more then that people live at the curtent place before then that same place 10 people live . result is it can solve many problen for liveing and it is also afforadble .

conclustion, The population is increaseing day by day they need sheilters in cites but their is no enough space . The tall apartment blocks solve that problem and make people lifestyle more easy and affordable for everybody

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the prompt regarding whether tall apartment blocks are the best way to provide housing in large cities. The student clearly states a position at the beginning ('i am agree with this statement') and attempts to support it with reasons, such as population growth and spatial limitations. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. For example, the points about space constraints and population increase are restated multiple times without significant extension. Furthermore, the examples provided lack specificity and contain implausible details, such as a New York Times article from 2026. While all parts of the task are touched upon, the lack of fully developed, well-supported arguments places this response firmly at Band 4.0, as ideas remain basic and somewhat tangential in their execution.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text demonstrates an attempt at paragraphing, with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, although the transitions between ideas are mechanical and repetitive. The student relies heavily on formulaic phrases such as 'To began with', 'To explain it', 'To cite an example', and 'Furthermore' to structure the essay. Unfortunately, referencing and logical progression are frequently faulty; ideas circle back on themselves without advancing the argument. For instance, the transition from population increase to the New York Times citation does not flow logically. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion of the paragraphs is weak, meaning information and ideas are not arranged in a fully coherent manner. This aligns with the Band 4 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily restricted. The student frequently misuses words or uses incorrect word forms, such as 'sheilters' for shelters, 'counstrust' for construct, 'artical' for article, 'artictat' for architect or artistry, 'certunt' for certain, and 'problen' for problem. Furthermore, spelling errors are pervasive throughout the response (e.g., 'wnt' instead of want, 'use full', 'afforadble', 'increaseing'). There is no evidence of less common vocabulary used with precision or stylistic awareness. The lexical range is minimal and frequently causes strain for the reader, matching the Band 4 criteria where basic, repetitive vocabulary and frequent errors impede fluent reading.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but these attempts are almost entirely faulty. There are severe and persistent errors in tense usage ('population of the world are increase'), subject-verb agreement ('every body need'), missing articles, and run-on sentences joined improperly without punctuation. For example, the sentence 'To explain it, every body need a place or sheilter of spend their life we call that place home' showcases multiple structural breakdowns. The majority of sentences contain grammatical errors that frequently cause difficulty for the reader and distort meaning, reflecting the characteristics of a Band 4 performance.

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