Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Housing is a great issue nowadays and it is a hot toppic of debate nowadays that how to accomodate people more efficiently in big cites. People think that tall apartment blocks are the most efficient way of accomodating a large number of people while acquiring less land. From my perspective, apartment blocks are a great way of accomodating large number of people they come with some issues which we need to solve.

The most benefical thing about apartment blocks is that a large number of people can be residing in a single block while less land is acquired. By building tall towers instead of building seprate houses, land can be saved and used for other purposes. As the population is increasing, we need more land which is often obtained by deforestration which comes with a lot of negative affects on climate and contributes to global warming. This can be prevented through building apartment blocks. Besides the environmental benefits, apartment blocks come with some social benefits. Instead of a small neigbourhood, people residing apartment have a big neighbourhood resluting in a number of social activities like celebrating festivals. This community is beneficial in many ways for example if a person gets sick, his/her neighbours take care of him/her. People often cook dishes and send it to each other as a gesture of hospitality.

Besides all the positive aspects people often ignore the negative aspects of living in apartment blocks. A great concern while living in apartment blocks is safety from natural disasters for example fire, earthquake. It has been observed repeatedly that people living in apartment blocks often get stuck in case of fire or earthquake which results in number of casualties. Recently 30 poeple died of suffocation as they got stuck in their apartments when a fire broke out. However, these incidents happen usually due to the negligence of apartment builders and management. In order to save cost contractors often use cheap materials in building and it results in a sudden collapse during earthquake. On the other hand, negligence by management often caueses more casualities as they ignore safety concerns which turn out to be an accident. The most recent example of this negligence was seen in PIMS Islamabad where about 15 newborns lost their lives.

In conclusion, apartment blocks are agreat solution to accomodate people especially considering the increasing population but the safety measures should be kept in mind both while building and managing these apartments. The contractors should build structures capable of surviving possible earthquakes and they should provide emergency exits for people residing there. On the other hand the management should keep a proper check and balance of emergency exits and kits like fire extinguishers.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The student addresses all parts of the task by presenting a clear position on whether tall apartment blocks are the best way to provide housing in large cities. The introduction outlines the writer's perspective, and the body paragraphs discuss both the environmental and social benefits alongside the critical safety concerns regarding natural disasters and management negligence. Ideas are extended and supported with relevant examples, such as mentioning deforestation and building safety issues. However, the reference to 'PIMS Islamabad' is slightly tangential to residential apartment safety, as it relates to a hospital incident rather than tall apartment blocks. Despite this minor straying, the position remains clear throughout, and the main arguments are well-developed, aligning strongly with the Band 7 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response exhibits a clear logical organisation and progression throughout. The essay is divided into appropriate paragraphs, starting with an introduction, moving to benefits, discussing drawbacks, and concluding with a summary and recommendations. Cohesive devices are used adequately to connect ideas, such as 'Besides the environmental benefits', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion'. However, referencing and transitional flow are occasionally mechanical or slightly repetitive with phrases like 'hot toppic of debate nowadays' and 'besides all the positive aspects people often ignore'. Paragraphing is used sufficiently and appropriately, but logical progression could be smoother. These features place the response comfortably within the Band 6 to 7 range, settling at a solid 6.5.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common items such as 'deforestation', 'global warming', 'casualities', and 'negligence'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, including 'toppic' instead of 'topic', 'accomodate' instead of 'accommodate', 'cites' instead of 'cities', 'benefical' instead of 'beneficial', 'seprate' instead of 'separate', 'neigbourhood' instead of 'neighbourhood', 'resluting' instead of 'resulting', and 'caueses' instead of 'causes'. While these errors do not impede communication because the meaning remains clear, their frequency prevents the score from reaching a higher band. The lexical control reflects the Band 6 descriptor where vocabulary is adequate but contains spelling and word-choice errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating the ability to construct compound and complex sentences such as 'As the population is increasing, we need more land which is often obtained by deforestration...' and 'In order to save cost contractors often use cheap materials...'. There are several grammatical errors and punctuation slips present, such as missing articles ('living in apartment' instead of 'living in apartments'), run-on phrasing, and comma splices. Furthermore, spelling issues spill over into morphology and word forms. Despite these errors, they rarely impede communication, as the core message of each sentence remains understandable. This balance of mixed structures and persistent errors aligns well with the Band 6 descriptors.

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