Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The great way to provide sufficiant homes to the citizens in big towns or cities is to make a tall towers, this is because of the rapidly increasing population and making tall building gives a positive impact, it can help people to find there dream homes in the city they wants to live.

This essay totaly agrees to the statement of providing sufficiant homes in large cities is to build tall towers, because it can help citizens to find there exact home they are looking for. Sometimes people faces lack of apartments in the city they are looking for, so making tall building is useful for all who are looking for the best aparment under their budget. For example, finding the home that matches your requirements may be hard because shortage of apartment in the city you are looking for.

Building highted tower may increase the space of land because of multiple apartment are in one single tower and by my perspective, providing gym, swimming pool, and some kind of extra curriculum activity area in the remaining or free land space may make peoples lives better, they do not need to go out of their building because they can get all the required amenities in their tower. Moreover we can also get the top view of the city because of having tall building.

To sum up, providing sufficiant homes to the citizens in tall towers makes people lives easy

to find the best looking aparment of their choice. And making tall building also saves the land and can be used for other activites.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position that tall apartment blocks are the best solution for providing homes in large cities. The writer presents relevant ideas, such as population growth, land saving, and incorporating community amenities like gyms and swimming pools. However, the ideas are often repetitive and lack deep extension. For example, the argument that tall buildings help people find their exact home under budget is restated several times without introducing new supporting evidence. Additionally, the over-generalisation that building highted towers increases the space of land is slightly confusing, as it actually refers to maximizing land efficiency. Consequently, the task response falls into Band 5 or 6, where ideas are relevant but under-developed and lack fully articulated support. Because the minimum length requirement is met, the score is based purely on the depth of content provided.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay displays a basic overall arrangement with a clear introduction and conclusion, fitting into standard essay paragraphs. However, coherence is frequently hindered by mechanical or faulty cohesive devices and referencing errors. For example, the writer uses expressions like 'this is because of' and 'moreover' rather repetitively, and referencing pronouns such as 'there dream homes' (instead of their) cause minor tracking issues. Paragraphing is attempted, with body paragraphs separating different ideas like land usage and amenities, but the logical progression between sentences feels disjointed due to run-on structures. For instance, the first paragraph consists of one extremely long, comma-spliced sentence. Overall, the organizational structure demonstrates features of Band 5, where information and ideas are present and grouped into paragraphs, but overall progression lacks smooth, accurate transitions.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is limited and frequently repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'homes', 'city', 'building', and 'apartment'. There are also numerous spelling and word-choice errors that stem from phonetic confusion, such as 'sufficiant' (sufficient), 'there' (their), 'totaly' (totally), 'aparment' (apartment), and 'highted' (high-rise or tall). While the writer attempts some less common vocabulary items such as 'amenities', 'population', and 'extra curriculum activity', inaccuracies in word formation and collocation prevent the score from reaching a higher band. These errors do not entirely impede communication because the general meaning remains clear, aligning closely with the descriptors for Band 5, where vocabulary is minimally adequate for the task but marked by noticeable lexical errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is weak, resulting in frequent errors that affect readability. There are many comma splices and run-on sentences, particularly in the opening paragraph: 'The great way to provide sufficiant homes to the citizens in big towns or cities is to make a tall towers, this is because of...'. Grammatical inaccuracies include subject-verb agreement errors ('making tall building gives', 'people faces'), article misuse ('making a tall towers'), and incorrect prepositional usage ('in the city they wants to live'). Complex structures are frequently attempted, but they contain structural flaws and punctuation issues. Because errors are frequent and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, yet basic meaning is still conveyed, the performance corresponds to a Band 5 level.

See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.