Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In large cities, providing enough home for the growing challenges. Some people believed that building tall apartment blocks is the best solution. I agree with this view because high rise building can saved valuable land and provide a home for many people.
On the one hand, the most important part is that land saving is very important for agricultural crops. When we are build many building it affect the overall agricultural production. Furthermore, cities areas provide a large number of facilities like transport, health ,education and job opportunity. Therefore, constructing high rise apartments allows more families to live in the same house area without using too much land. For example, a single tall building can provide hundreds apartments which can help reduced the storage of house.
On the other hand, build tall building in cities area is best ideas to saved valuable land. When make a tall apartments the one apartments provide a different facilities. They have possible to provide all facilities in one building. Cities area give us more facility and opportunity to get success in life. The land valuation is very high in cities area. In contrast if we make a tall apartments we are also saving our money and saved a time.
In conclusion, I agree that building tall apartments blocks is an effective way to provide enough homes in large cities. They can accommodate more people. The overall development of country is helping these way when we are save our land. Therefore, high rise housing can be an important solution to the growing demand for homes.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position that building tall apartment blocks is the best way to provide enough homes in large cities. The main ideas, such as saving agricultural land and accommodating more families in urban areas, are relevant and extended, though the second body paragraph repeats similar points about land saving and facilities rather than developing distinct new arguments. Overall, all parts of the task are addressed, earning a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is divided into an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, showing an overall logical arrangement. Paragraphing is used appropriately. However, the progression within paragraphs is sometimes hindered by repetitive ideas and mechanical cohesive devices like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand,' which are used incorrectly since both paragraphs argue in favour of the statement rather than presenting contrasting views. Referencing is occasionally unclear, yielding a Band 5.5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with attempts at less common items such as 'agricultural production' and 'high rise housing.' However, there are numerous word choice and collocation errors, such as 'storage of house' instead of 'housing shortage,' 'build many building,' and 'land valuation' instead of 'land value.' Spelling and morphological errors ('saved' instead of 'save') are noticeable but do not entirely impede communication, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'When we are build many building it affect the overall agricultural production.' However, grammatical accuracy is weak throughout, with frequent errors in verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and tense consistency (e.g., 'Some people believed,' 'can saved,' 'When make a tall apartments'). These frequent errors can cause some difficulty for the reader, aligning closely with a Band 5.0.
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