Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This issue had sparked debate among Indiviuals from numerous part of years, In the modern era their is no enough land for the construction of better homes so i agree with the viewpoint because it have several important advantages like it will help in our economy, agriculture and creating a good realtionship with others.
Initially, Now a days many people wanted to know others and their life but could not have enough time to give their dearest precious time moreover if they build tall apparments instead of homes so many people moved towards the appartments for instance they shall give time to their family friends if they live in the society .
On the one hand, if we look into the agriculture sites their is no enough space left for the harvesting and humenbeing were doing deforestation for their homes and its also causing the global warming for example due to the increase in population in the up coming years their will no space left in the rular area too.
On the other hand, the government should have to create a schemes for the installation of the appartments instead of homes therefore government have to focus on the structure and facilities that should provide citizens better accomodations to survive,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the prompt by agreeing that building tall apartment blocks is the best way to provide homes. However, the task achievement is significantly undermined by two main factors. First, the word count is only 209 words, falling short of the mandatory 250-word minimum requirement, which directly impacts the depth of idea development. Second, while the writer mentions advantages such as the economy, agriculture, and social relationships, the arguments remain underdeveloped, vague, and lack clear examples. The position is stated in the introduction, but the supporting points quickly drift into loosely related concepts without robust elaboration. Consequently, this falls under the Band 5 descriptor where ideas are limited and under-developed, and the response is penalized for failing the length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay displays an organizational structure with basic paragraphing, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a concluding thought. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by run-on sentences and poor cohesive ties. For instance, the writer relies on repetitive and mechanical transitions such as 'Initially,' 'On the one hand,' and 'On the other hand,' which are sometimes used incorrectly to introduce arguments. Referencing is frequently unclear, leaving the reader confused about pronoun antecedents like 'they' and 'others'. Paragraphing attempts are visible, but internal paragraph cohesion is weak, with multiple distinct ideas crammed into single, lengthy, unpunctuated sentences. These issues place the response firmly in the Band 5 category due to inadequate and inaccurate cohesive devices and a lack of clear overall progression.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used throughout the essay is basic, repetitive, and often inaccurate. The writer employs simple terms repeatedly, such as 'homes,' 'appartments' (spelled incorrectly as 'apparments' and 'appartments'), and 'space.' There are frequent word choice and spelling errors, such as 'Indiviuals,' 'realtionship,' 'humenbeing,' and 'rular area.' While the writer attempts some less common words like 'deforestation' and 'global warming,' their usage is clumsy and lacks lexical control. Furthermore, collocation errors are prevalent, such as 'give their dearest precious time.' Because the lexical range is narrow, repetitive, and plagued by noticeable spelling and word-choice errors that impede fluent reading, the response aligns with a Band 5 score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The grammatical structure of the essay is heavily flawed. The response consists mostly of very long, poorly punctuated run-on sentences joined incorrectly by commas and conjunctions like 'therefore' and 'moreover.' For example, the opening sentence is a massive comma splice: 'This issue had sparked debate among Indiviuals from numerous part of years, In the modern era their is no enough land...' There is a severe lack of control over basic verb tenses, subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'their is no enough land', 'government should have to create a schemes'), and punctuation. Complex sentence forms are attempted, but they are almost always faulty. Because errors are frequent, systematic, and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader to parse meaning, a Band 4.0 or 5.0 descriptor applies; a Band 5 is awarded due to the presence of some recognizable clause structures despite pervasive inaccuracies.
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