Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

It is the very good way to build a tall apartments in large cities because the big cities are very crowdid with the peoples so in this way we can reduce the extra land consuptions and everyone can settle in the the apartments easily.

Every country should have to build tall buildings with having large number of apartments because in the large cities contain more crowd as compared to small cities if we use large number of space is to build a house for a single person it will be more expensive and loss making decission

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is severely under-length, containing only 96 words against the required 250-word minimum. This results in a heavy penalty under Task Achievement as the ideas are only briefly stated and remain largely underdeveloped. While the writer attempts to address the prompt by agreeing that building tall apartments is a good way to provide homes in large cities, the position is simplistic and lacks extended reasoning or relevant examples. Phrases such as 'we can reduce the extra land consuptions' touch upon relevant arguments like land conservation, but they lack the necessary depth and expansion expected at higher bands. Consequently, the task is only addressed in a very limited way.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The response suffers from a lack of proper paragraphing, presented as just two dense run-on blocks of text. Cohesive devices are minimal and basic, primarily relying on repetitive conjunctions such as 'because' and 'so'. There is a lack of clear logical progression and referencing is sometimes confusing, as seen in strings of clauses without adequate punctuation or transition markers. Although the overall topic remains somewhat discernible, the mechanical structure and absence of clear organizational links place this aspect of the writing firmly within the lower-intermediate range.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently impeded by word-choice and spelling errors. Examples of inadequate lexical control include 'crowdid', 'peoples', 'consuptions', and 'loss making decission'. The writer attempts some topic-related vocabulary such as 'apartments', 'large cities', and 'land', but lacks the range and precision needed to discuss urban housing effectively. Spelling and morphological mistakes occur frequently throughout the text, indicating a very limited lexical repertoire that struggles to meet the basic demands of the task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak, characterized by a heavy reliance on run-on sentences joined improperly by coordinating conjunctions. There is a very limited range of structures attempted, and complex sentence formations are generally faulty, such as in 'Every country should have to build tall buildings with having large number of apartments'. Frequent errors in articles, pluralization, and verb patterns cause significant difficulty for the reader and obscure the intended meaning in multiple places. The majority of sentences contain noticeable grammatical errors.

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