Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

As we all live in modern era where technologies change on a daily basis which creates more opportunities to people to explore and take advantage from it and by this the living standards also increases.

People would like to work and live in large cities as compare to before advancements and technologies beacuse of avalibilties of neccesities and utilities. To build tall apartment blocks in large cities to accomodate people might be a good decision as many people get connected and enjoy the lexuary and also supports modern architacture and art.

However, due to build tall apartment blocks in large cities may concern towards the load pollution and envoirnmental damage as also might be cause for trafic jams and sky scarpers are also hides the beauty of nature the mountains and rivers and freash air. Due to many people the air also get poluted by releasing Co2 gas and many other harmful gases by using cars and different vahicle or by air conditoners.

Due to many people the crime rate also increase as the probability of accidents increses.

Furthermore, due to avilibility of many people may increase the competition in jobs, in education and in many other opportunities as well but other hand it is also good as people will more work on their skills and on personal development.

lastly, to build tall apartment blocks in big cities is a big topic although both have pros and cons either build it or not in my openion I think building tall apartment block is not good enough, we also need to consider the nature and beauty of nat

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing whether building tall apartment blocks is the best solution for providing housing in large cities, presenting a clear concluding stance against them. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive, characteristic of a Band 5 performance. While the writer touches on several relevant points—such as environmental concerns, pollution, traffic congestion, and infrastructure pressure—these points are generally under-developed and lack specific supporting examples. The introduction includes a lengthy preamble about modern technology and living standards that is only loosely connected to the core prompt. Overall, the task is addressed, but the arguments remain at a somewhat superficial level with broad generalizations, placing this response firmly in the Band 5 category for Task Achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay demonstrates some organization, but overall progression is hindered by poor paragraphing and run-on sentences. The entire body of the essay, apart from the introduction and a fragmented conclusion, is jammed into two excessively long paragraphs that attempt to cover too many disparate ideas simultaneously. Cohesive devices are used repetitively, particularly the phrase 'due to' and 'also', which appear multiple times in close succession ('Due to many people the air...', 'Due to many people the crime rate...', 'Due to avilibility...'). Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the abrupt cutoff at the end ('nature and beauty of nat') further disrupts the flow. These mechanical and inadequate cohesive features restrict the response to a Band 5 for Coherence and Cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The lexical range is limited and frequently hindered by noticeable errors in spelling, word choice, and word formation. The student attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'infrastructure', 'architacture', and 'skyscrapers', but many of these terms contain spelling errors ('beacuse', 'avalibilties', 'neccesities', 'accomodate', 'envoirnmental', 'vahicle', 'avilibility'). Furthermore, awkward phrasing such as 'load pollution' instead of 'noise pollution' and 'sky scarpers are also hides' demonstrates strain in collocation and word form. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey a basic meaning, the high frequency of spelling and lexical inaccuracies restricts the score to a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on positive marking for attempting a range of topic-related vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The grammatical structure of the essay is heavily reliant on long, run-on sentences joined by conjunctions like 'and', 'which', and 'although', resulting in a lack of clear punctuation and frequent grammatical slips. For instance, the opening sentence is a single massive clause-chain that lacks a main structural break. There are numerous grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('the living standards also increases', 'the crime rate also increase'), incorrect prepositions ('take advantage from it'), and faulty sentence fragments ('As we all live in modern era...'). While a mix of simple and complex forms is attempted, the frequent errors in grammar and punctuation occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, placing this text at a Band 5 level.

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