Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-27

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In this contemporary era people moved in larger cities for many reasons ; like Batter health facility ,employement opportunity,and for luxurious life.some people belive that for good concept that to provide a enough houde in huge cities so it is to create a tall buildings blocks that cause people live easily in and with more comfort.

I agree with this that a tall apartment was enough to provide a best homes in larger city beacause there are many people migrate from rural area to uraban are for their higher comfort and boost their economy.In larger city there are many tall and wider apartment are available but still thare are not enough for this population.some people give their various oppinian for better housing facilities in big cities.

In big city have a taller buildinf that have many benificial for the popuation of the city.in addition there are a taller apartment at present but enough for this generation.For illusrtates,if the government was make tall buildings in big cities that call people get more facinating and that cause improve the population of cities because in taller buidinf have more room and that cause higher people able to live and then got their comfort un achive their goal with comfort .Moreover ,big cities have taller bulding have more people that increased cities economy and improve the living facilities with the good financial condition as well as good environment.Hovever,taller building have a beautiful shape that facinating people to get the ticket for on their holidays for travelling.In conclusion ,tall bulding have enough space for living in big ci

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response addresses the prompt by expressing agreement with the idea that tall apartment blocks are the best way to provide housing in large cities. However, the development of ideas is severely restricted by pervasive language errors and repetition. While the writer mentions migration from rural areas and economic benefits, the arguments remain underdeveloped and difficult to follow due to poor expression. The position is discernible at the beginning, but the overall execution fails to extend ideas effectively. Consequently, the response aligns best with a Band 4 descriptor, where the task is addressed only minimally or tangentially due to the lack of clear, coherent elaboration.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The organisation of the text is highly problematic. Although basic paragraph breaks are attempted, information and ideas are not arranged coherently. Sentences such as 'In big city have a taller buildinf that have many benificial for the popuation of the city' demonstrate a lack of logical progression. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, and referencing is unclear throughout. The response ends abruptly mid-sentence ('in big ci'), indicating a failure in overall structuring. This places the performance firmly at Band 4, where the flow of information is severely disrupted.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily flawed. The writer attempts some less common words, such as 'contemporary', 'facinating', and 'economy', but frequent errors in word choice, spelling ('employement', 'belive', 'houde', 'uraban', 'buildinf', 'benificial', 'bulding'), and collocation strain the reader. Phrases like 'higher people able to live' demonstrate a fundamental misunderstanding of lexical patterns. Because the lexical range is very limited and errors frequently obscure meaning, the writing fits the Band 4 descriptor.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak throughout the response. There is a very limited range of sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are consistently faulty, such as 'some people belive that for good concept that to provide a enough houde in huge cities so it is to create a tall buildings blocks'. Punctuation and basic grammar rules, such as subject-verb agreement and article usage, are persistently violated. Errors are so frequent that they constantly impede communication and distort meaning, placing this performance at Band 4.

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