Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
It is widely acknowledged that providing enough houses in urban areas is to construct enormous apartment blocks . I beleive that upsides are associated more than downsides which will be explained in upcoming paragraphs with logical coclusion.
To begin with, in many cities there are some homes are provide in large cities it is good for human privacy. To eleborate it, if people live in homes in urban cities they are safe and can not feel unprivacy.They doing anything in their houses like sleeping, eating, entertaning. Individuals spend many time in their homes with their family, relatives, friends. Secondly, mankind have no stress to pay any house rent, because they have their own houses. They can not tackel any problem like houses registress, rents, any police verification.
On the other hand, in major cities is to build tall apartment blocks. I think it is better to use for some people. If individuals in tall apartment blocks they feel unprivacy some times and they have always stressed about their apartment rent. They are always aware about their around activites. Human live along in their apartment any other person always interfare in their life, so people are frastrated in some times. Mostly workers and students use apartment thses days because they live their house and staying another place for their work and study.
In conclusion, apartment blocks owner should provide security to all person who live in their apartments, so every individuals feel safe and do not have any stress while homes in population cities is also good for every people because person doing anything at their house and they can go inside an doutside at any time in their houses.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the prompt regarding whether tall apartment blocks are the best way to provide housing in large cities. However, the position is somewhat confused and difficult to follow. The writer states in the introduction that the upsides outweigh the downsides, but the body paragraphs frequently shift back and forth between perceived advantages (safety, privacy, no rent stress) and disadvantages (lack of privacy, high rent stress, interference from others) in a repetitive and contradictory manner. Ideas are under-developed due to frequent digressions and a lack of clear supporting examples. While the writer touches on relevant themes such as urbanization and worker accommodation, the overall delivery remains limited in task fulfillment, aligning closely with the Band 5 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, showing some basic organization. However, there is no clear overall progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are either misused or inadequate, such as the awkward transition 'On the other hand, in major cities is to build tall apartment blocks.' Paragraphing is attempted, but internal paragraph coherence is frequently broken by abrupt shifts in topic, such as jumping from house rent to police verification and back to privacy issues. Referencing is often unclear, leaving the reader confused about which group or living situation is being discussed. This level of organization corresponds to a Band 4.5 or 5.0, comfortably landing at Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple terms such as 'homes', 'cities', 'people', and 'house'. There are numerous word choice and collocation errors, such as 'homes are provide', 'feel unprivacy', 'around activites', and 'frastrated'. Spelling errors also occur, including 'beleive', 'eleborate', 'entertaning', 'tackel', 'registress', and 'interfare'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for conveying basic ideas, though frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader, matching the Band 5 criteria.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, leading to grammatically broken or incomprehensible phrasing, such as 'It is widely acknowledged that providing enough houses in urban areas is to construct enormous apartment blocks' and 'because person doing anything at their house and they can go inside an doutside at any time'. There are frequent errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions throughout the essay (e.g., 'Individuals spend many time', 'mankind have no stress', 'students use apartment thses days because they live their house and staying another place'). These errors cause frequent strain for the reader, placing the response firmly at Band 4.0.
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