Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the modern era , the sutibale way to provided sufficient accommodation in bigger cities is to esthablished high rise apartments . I strongly agree with this statement .My justification will be provided in the upcoming paragraphs along with relevant examples .
To begin with , one of the foundamental reason is , it help individuals to get homes in lower cost . To elaborate , in develop cities , the cost of renting a house or buying a home is cost much more than develping cities . Therefore , if high-rise apartment were bulit , it cost less to individuals , and it will be convenent for tham to rent or buy flat in large cities . As a result , despite living in develop city , individuals can stay finacialy stable by living in apartment . For example , a study found that , average rent of the home in urben city is 3x higher than renting a flat in develop city .
Furthermore , Another perdominently bentifit is get access of amenities . To explain , many apartment provide amenties such as swmming pool , garden , gym , games room , therefore , it will be very convenent for individuals to use those thing without warrying about thier maintances . Whereas , in personal home , people have do regulary maintain thier amenities . For example , in india , there is an low in apartment , about every apartment have to proived amenities such as garden or gym to their people without charging it from the tham .
On the other hand , one of major drawback is , indiviuals feel isloated by living in tall apartment . To explain , many peolple perfer to living in big spaces . However , most of the apartment space are enclosed . and the apartment dose not get enough fresh air Therfore , people feel streets or deprasion by living in their .
In conclusion , although , bullding tall apartment indivduals feels can feel isloated and might can into street ,.Whereas , in my opinon , building high-rise apartment cost less to indivudals and get access of amenitis with warry ing about thier maintances .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by clearly taking a stance in agreement with the statement and attempting to provide reasons and examples. The writer explores arguments related to housing costs, access to amenities, and psychological drawbacks such as feelings of isolation. However, the ideas lack full development and suffer from frequent sweeping generalisations and underdeveloped examples, such as the vague reference to a study or the specific legal claim about India. Furthermore, some arguments become slightly repetitive or unclear due to expression issues. Despite these limitations, all parts of the task are addressed, earning a band score of 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs addressing advantages and disadvantages, and a conclusion. However, progression is frequently disrupted by awkward linking and mechanical transitional phrases like 'To begin with', 'To explain', and 'On the other hand' which are sometimes misused or overused. Referencing is occasionally unclear, as seen in pronouns whose antecedents are muddled, and paragraphing conventions are marred by spacing errors around punctuation. Overall arrangement provides a basic coherent structure, but cohesion is faulty and repetitive, aligning with a band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and contains numerous basic spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, such as 'sutibale', 'provided', 'esthablished', 'foundamental', 'develop' instead of 'developed', 'urben', 'bentifit', 'swmming', 'maintances', 'isloated', 'dose', and 'deprasion'. While the writer attempts less common vocabulary like 'accommodation' and 'predominantly', the high frequency of lexical and spelling inaccuracies causes noticeable difficulty for the reader and occasionally obscures meaning, placing the vocabulary firmly at a band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are frequent errors in verb forms, tense consistency, and prepositions, such as 'it help individuals to get', 'is cost much more', 'apartment were bulit , it cost less', 'people have do regulary maintain', and 'might can into street'. Punctuation is also erratic, with spaces improperly placed before commas and periods. While basic meaning is sometimes conveyed, frequent errors cause difficulty and grammatical accuracy is poor, justifying a band 5.0.
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