Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays, inceasing populations in the urban eara, because people prefer to live in the city. Majority of folks are in the favour of this statetment due to number of merits. Howevre, some of the people highlight its demerits first. I 80% agree and 20% disagree with this statement. In my further paragraphs, positives and negatives will be the same discusseed.
Initiating with the reasons of the same, the first and foremost reason is that if organiser provide homes to people in the cities, therefore older individual feel difficult to agjess in appartment, because older generation want ive in open area where bieng wide yard front of the house. Similarly, they prefer to live with thrir childhood friends and demand for spend time with them. If people prefer to live in flet, so they cannot survive with small area.
On the other hand, if people want to live in the city for living trendy life so in the city has not enough sarface to provide enough home. So organisation creat the large number of home by big building, for example appartment, there live lots of people without crowed. Furthermore, if government, has must not construct flet in the city, therefore, in the urban area has become crowded place.
Moreover, appartment is best and convinient for live for small family, however, in the city there are housing area is very expencive to buy home or rent as well.
In conclusion, to the above astatement, it is a mixed bag of positives and negatives. Hence, the statement should not underestimated. I think appartment is good way to provide homes, but its make some drawback for seniercetezen.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task question regarding whether tall apartment blocks are the best way to provide enough homes in large cities. The writer's position is stated as an 80% agreement and 20% disagreement, which is somewhat unconventional but clear enough. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times confusing. For example, the student discusses older individuals preferring open areas with wide yards in the second paragraph, but the connection to the prompt's focus on tall apartment blocks in large cities is somewhat muddled. Some points are repeated or under-developed, particularly when discussing housing costs and urbanization. While all parts of the prompt are touched upon, the lack of fully extended supporting arguments places this response firmly in the band 5 range according to the official descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the overall organization lacks a smooth logical progression. The introduction contains awkward referencing, such as 'In my further paragraphs, positives and negatives will be the same discusseed.' Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'Initiating with the reasons of the same' and 'On the other hand, if people want to live in the city for living trendy life so in the city has not enough sarface'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal flow of ideas within paragraphs is disjointed and repetitive. The progression of thought is frequently disrupted by mechanical transitions and unclear referencing, corresponding closely to band 5 characteristics.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with noticeable errors in word choice and spelling that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. Examples of errors include 'inceasing', 'eara', 'statetment', 'Howevre', 'agjess', 'appartment', 'bieng', 'flet', 'sarface', 'convinient', 'expencive', 'seniercetezen', and 'astatement'. While the writer attempts some less common vocabulary items such as 'urban area' and 'convinient', the high frequency of spelling and lexical errors restricts the vocabulary to a limited, minimally adequate range, aligning with a band 4.5 or rounded to a 5.0 descriptor profile.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The essay displays a very limited range of sentence structures, with frequent grammatical errors that often cause difficulty and strain for the reader. Complex sentence attempts are generally faulty, such as in the conditional and relative clauses: 'if organiser provide homes to people in the cities, therefore older individual feel difficult to agjess in appartment, because older generation want ive in open area'. There are persistent errors in subject-verb agreement ('older generation want ive', 'organisation creat', 'appartment is best'), article usage, and prepositions ('in the city has not enough sarface'). The high frequency of errors across both simple and complex structures places this performance at a band 4.
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