Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
it can be seen that building a tall appartments in large cities can be the best way to provide enough home .this essay intends to discuss both views in the upcomung paragraphs.
there are numerous reasons why people think that flats can be the best way for providing enough homes in urban areas.to begin with,the prime merit behind this is that it helps to reduce crowd in the cities.for example,people are moving to the cities they all are require homes moreover,if every family make their own home cities become more crowded so,it is better to live in the blocks.another reason worth mentioning is that,it also helps to increase the facility.to cite an example,if they started to live in buildings and space will free so that area can be used for shopping centres,food apartments,hotels.furthermore,hundred of people can be stay in a building.
some people howerver might argue that it also led to disturbances between the people.if a person wants to enjoy music it may disturb other locality.there are various restrictions applied on them. but in their personal house,they may fell free
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the benefits and drawbacks of building tall apartment blocks in large cities. However, the student's position is somewhat unclear due to the contradictory phrasing in the introduction regarding discussing 'both views' despite the prompt asking for an 'extent of agreement'. Furthermore, the response suffers from significant under-development of ideas. The essay contains only 180 words, which severely breaches the minimum requirement of 250 words. As a direct result of this severe length penalty, the score is significantly constrained. To improve, the student must expand their supporting arguments with concrete explanations and specific examples, ensuring the full word count is met.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text demonstrates a basic attempt at logical organisation, dividing points into paragraphs for merits and drawbacks. However, paragraphing is underdeveloped, and the introduction is awkwardly split. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, and frequently inaccurate (e.g. 'to begin with', 'moreover', 'so', 'furthermore'). Punctuation and spacing errors heavily disrupt the flow of the text, such as missing spaces after commas and periods (e.g. 'areas.to begin with,the prime merit'). Referencing is sometimes unclear, and there is no clear overall progression of ideas. To reach a higher band, the student needs to use a wider, more natural range of cohesive devices and ensure correct punctuation and spacing.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and limited in range (e.g. 'homes', 'cities', 'building', 'people'). There are numerous lexical and spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'appartments', 'upcomung', 'crowd' instead of 'crowding', and 'fell free' instead of 'feel free'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary like 'urban areas' and 'restrictions', but inaccurate word choices and spellings impede clarity. To improve, the student should expand their vocabulary related to urban planning and housing, focusing on correct collocations and accurate spelling of common academic terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles (e.g. 'building tall appartments'), incorrect verb forms (e.g. 'people are moving to the cities they all are require homes', 'if they started to live', 'it also led'), and run-on sentences. Punctuation errors are pervasive, particularly the omission of spaces following punctuation marks. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a limited command of grammatical structures. Practising basic sentence boundaries, subject-verb agreement, and article usage will help improve this score.
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