Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In todays's world where population are incresing in significant manner providing everyone sallter to live is very important. for matching this rapidly incressing need there is need of tall apartment buildings. I furmly belive and support to building tall building.

In many cities government hase to cut down forest to meet the demand of land to provide shelters. That is not very good for environment, it increases the chances of rising temperature and many more problems. Insted of that some government are making plans that affect less to environment and support more to people. In India cities like Mumbai, Delhi, Hydrabad government having the issue of overpopulation so specialy Mumbai government introduce the redevelopment of old stuctures. That can help reducing the price of land and appartment. On the different part of India where some parts are still developing govenmrnt introduce major helps in tall building construction rather than traditional housing. Furthermore providing exlusive deals and luxuries in apartment block than rehular housing.

In the metro cities like Ahemedabad and Mumbai govenment introducing low taxed plan for the heigh rise building than ever beffore, in addition government are learning from other state and global problems to better mapping there cities carefully. On global stages, like USA are facing major problems of incrising price of housing and not meeting the demand of housing, this problem is solved by tall heighted building near the main cities.

In conclusion, providing efficient housing shelter to every citizen is very important in order to compete with this government should support tall aprtment building with proper safety.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing whether building tall apartment blocks is the best solution for providing homes in large cities. You clearly state your position in the introduction ("I furmly belive and support to building tall building") and maintain this stance throughout the essay. Relevant ideas are introduced, such as environmental protection, urban redevelopment in cities like Mumbai and Delhi, and global housing shortages. However, the development of these ideas remains somewhat limited and under-developed. Sentences often jump between different points without sufficient elaboration or concrete examples. For instance, mentioning cities like Ahmedabad, Mumbai, and the USA touches upon good concepts, but the explanations lack depth and logical extension. To reach a higher band, you should expand upon your arguments with more detailed explanations and specific real-world consequences rather than listing multiple brief examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay displays a basic overall organization with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a brief conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by abrupt transitions and a lack of clear cohesive ties. For example, sentences like "On the different part of India where some parts are still developing govenmrnt introduce major helps..." lack smooth integration with the preceding text. Paragraphing is attempted, but the second body paragraph is overly long and crams several distinct ideas together without clear signposting. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and cohesive devices are either absent or mechanically applied. To improve, you need to use clear topic sentences for each paragraph and employ a wider, more accurate range of linking words to connect your ideas logically and smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, struggling to meet the demands of an Academic task. While you attempt some less common vocabulary such as "overpopulation," "redevelopment," and "traditional housing," there are numerous spelling and word-choice errors that detract from the writing. Examples of lexical inaccuracies include "sallter" instead of shelter, "incresing" instead of increasing, "furmly" instead of firmly, "stuctures" instead of structures, and "aprtsonent" or "appartment." Additionally, phrases like "major helps" and "low taxed plan" are unnatural and incorrect collocations. Although communication is generally maintained despite these errors, the frequent spelling mistakes place the vocabulary firmly in the lower-intermediate range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Your grammatical range is restricted mainly to simple and basic complex sentences, and control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent. There are frequent errors throughout the text, particularly with verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and articles. Examples include "population are incresing" (population is increasing), "government hase to cut down" (governments have to cut down), "government having the issue" (governments have the issue), and "govenmrnt introduce" (governments introduced). Punctuation is also weak, marked by a lack of capitalisation at the beginning of sentences (e.g., "for matching this...", "In todays's world...") and missing commas where needed. These persistent errors can cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the essay from achieving a higher band score.

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