Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
A better way to provide homes for people to live in the large cities is to build tall apartment blocks of community.This helps people to connet with different cultures in the same place.The size of an apartment is compact for people to live in.
On one hand,developing tall apartment made it easier for people to live in a place close to their people.Constructing them provided enough space for many families who wish to say at that place.Making it easier for them to commute from place to place.There are many positive side of it.One of them is that the apartment blocks has several facilities like gym for people to workout,playground for children to play in,yoga or pilates classes for the elders to stay healthy and fit.The people can celebrate different festival from diffrent cultures together with their neighbours.
On the other hand, Developing such tall apartments makes it difficult for the environment.The quality of air detiriod as the floor rises.The apartments has very small space making it difficut to live in.For example mumbai has opportunities which made the land price to rise and the developers make tall apartment blocks on a single peice of land.The price of apartment became high and the space they provide is compact.This results in people living in a 2 BHK apartment with a higher rent as that area has many benefits such as great commute,job opportunities,easy access to education.
In conclusion,constructing tall apartments make it easier for people to connet with others have a quality time with eachother,and makes it difficut to live in because of the apartment size is small.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the extent of agreement regarding tall apartment blocks as a solution for housing in large cities. The writer presents a clear position supporting this view while acknowledging counterarguments regarding environmental impacts and high rent. Ideas are introduced, such as community benefits, facilities, and cost implications, but they tend to be somewhat generalised and under-developed due to limited elaboration. For example, the mention of Mumbai provides a specific context, but the explanation remains brief. According to the band 6 descriptors, the task is addressed with relevant ideas, though some parts lack deeper exploration.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The essay displays a coherent overall arrangement with a recognizable introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is attempted, though some paragraphs mix contrasting ideas or contain abrupt transitions. Cohesive devices such as 'On one hand,' 'On the other hand,' and 'In conclusion' are employed to guide the reader, but referencing is occasionally imprecise, as seen in sentences like 'developing tall apartment made it easier for people to live in a place close to their people.' While the progression of ideas is discernible, the cohesion can feel slightly mechanical, aligning well with the band 6 descriptor profile.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, covering common housing and urban topics such as 'apartment blocks,' 'facilities,' 'environment,' and 'job opportunities.' The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'compact,' 'commute,' and 'detiriod,' but this is accompanied by noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, including 'detiriod' instead of 'deteriorated' and 'peice' instead of 'piece.' Although these errors occasionally catch the reader's attention, they do not severely impede communication, which places this performance firmly at band 6.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The writer demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting structures like conditional and relative clauses. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly regarding subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'developing tall apartment made,' 'The apartments has,' and 'the price of apartment became high.' Punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after periods, also detract from the overall accuracy. Because these errors do not completely obscure the meaning and a mix of structures is present, a band 5.0 is appropriate.
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