Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Many people think now a days cities expansion is very challenging people facing many issue among all this issues there is one highlighted one is build tall apartment blocks because people facing shortage of land in cities and if some of the properties are available its in very highly conjusted area so every person having there dream to build home in current period but the land and properties prices are to high in tier 3 and tier 2 citys espically and metro cities facing a big problem of space in there area so many people think builiding tall apartment blocks increase number of homes where big amount of population live in and its less conjusted and costing is too low in compare with purchasing land and bulind private appartment home but each things has its own pros and cons like if we build tall building the maintance cost is very high and large number of popoulation means we have co operative with everyone

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response only minimally addresses the task, touching upon the topic of building tall apartment blocks in cities, but it fails to develop a clear position. Furthermore, the writing falls significantly short of the required word count, totaling only 163 words against the minimum of 250 words. The ideas presented, such as the shortage of land, high property prices, and maintenance costs, are underdeveloped and presented in a fragmented manner without proper examples or extended explanation. To improve towards a higher band, the writer must ensure that the word count requirement is fully met, state a clear position on the prompt, and develop each main idea with relevant supporting arguments and explanations in separate paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Information and ideas are not arranged coherently in this response. The text is written as a single, continuous run-on sentence without any paragraph breaks or logical structuring. Cohesive devices are largely absent, making it difficult for the reader to follow a clear progression of thoughts. For instance, phrases like 'among all this issues' and 'each things has its own pros and cons' fail to effectively link ideas together. To achieve a higher band, the writer needs to group ideas into distinct paragraphs, such as an introduction, body paragraphs with distinct points, and a conclusion, while using a wider and more accurate range of cohesive devices to guide the reader smoothly through the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, reflecting a limited range that strains the reader's comprehension. There are noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, such as 'now a days', 'conjusted', 'bulind', 'appartment', and 'popoulation'. While the writer attempts to discuss housing challenges and building costs, the inaccurate word forms and spelling mistakes impede smooth communication. To move up to the next band, the student must develop a wider vocabulary range, pay closer attention to standard spelling rules, and correctly use collocations and word forms, such as distinguishing between adjectives and nouns like 'congested' and 'congestion'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting primarily of a single, overly long sentence that strings multiple clauses together without correct punctuation. Errors are frequent and often distort the intended meaning, notably the complete absence of full stops, missing auxiliary verbs, and incorrect subject-verb agreement as seen in 'people facing many issue' and 'every person having there dream'. Complex structures are attempted unsuccessfully due to faulty punctuation and poor clause connection. To improve, the writer must focus on basic sentence construction, using correct end-of-sentence punctuation, and ensuring accurate verb forms and agreement across simple and compound sentences.

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