Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In the contemptory world, there are a trend to go to cities for particular motive. So that, nowadays, increasing of the civilization people came to cities due to this the number of people increasing day by day and they need to homes to stay. So that, the best way is that constructed tall apartment is very beneficial for the people in large cities. To a major extend, i strongly agree with the given view. My inclination will be elucidate in the following paragraph with relevant example.

Firstly, according to the view, constucted tall building is good way rather than staying in row houses and low rise. It has many advantage to build a tall buildings. Nowadays we know that, the number of people increasing day by day so their accomandation they need to deforession due to construct the houses. If we build the tall building it provieds 15 floors which is taken place almost 15 to 20 houses. For example, a one area which has contain vegetation but due to civilization this place unfortunetely need to clean for construction. If we clean the green place in small amount and construct tall building it is advantegeous. And also people can get good facalities and save environment.

Secondly, wild life is also important for our environment. due to high population nowadays wild life become dangerous. If we taken their living place for our earning purpose such as build buildings, factories and project. For example, a wild life sanctury which is unfortunetely deconstructed for build a mega company. As a result, wild life become danderous and we feel also face a difficulties about the environment. If we build a tall building which is rea,lly very beneficial for both human being and as well as wild life.

It has also some disadvantages such as if any natural disaster occure at thhat time we feel not safe to stay tall building and also some elder people who are not eble to clime a staircase and we feel lack of attachment of people to stay high building. For example, if we stay in soceity and row house we talking with our neighboures but in tall buildings we can not talk too much with them

In conclusion, i strongly agree with the given view for some great advantages such as saving vegetation, natural environment and also wild life sanctury. It has some bad points but strong points is quite beneficial for both king of them. So that, i really think that, the tall apartment is the best way to provide in large cities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overall position agreeing with the statement. Relevant ideas are presented to support the stance, such as saving vegetation, land space, and protecting wildlife habitats by building upwards. However, some ideas are under-developed or lack clarity, particularly the second body paragraph regarding wildlife, where the reasoning becomes somewhat convoluted and tangential. While the main arguments are identifiable, the extension of ideas tends to be repetitive rather than thoroughly elaborated with strong, specific examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a coherent overall arrangement to the essay, featuring basic paragraphing with clear topical divisions for advantages, disadvantages, and conclusion. However, cohesion is frequently mechanical and repetitive, relying heavily on transitional phrases like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'So that'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the logical progression between sentences occasionally breaks down, particularly in the transitions dealing with environmental impacts. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion within paragraphs could be significantly improved for a smoother flow of ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, but the range is limited and contains numerous errors in word choice, word form, and spelling that occasionally impede communication. The student attempts less common vocabulary, such as 'contemptory', 'civilization', and 'accomandation', but these attempts result in noticeable inaccuracies ('deforession', 'sanctury', 'facalities'). Spelling errors are frequent throughout the text, and awkward collocations appear regularly, restricting the lexical score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, though attempts at complex structures are often faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors involving subject-verb agreement ('there are a trend', 'the number of people increasing'), article omission or misuse ('a tall building', 'wild life'), and inappropriate prepositions. Punctuation is basic, and run-on sentences with 'so that' occur multiple times. Although communication is rarely completely blocked, errors in grammar and structure persist across most sentences.

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