Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The good way to give more houses in big cities is to construct tall flats block.In my opinion, If we build socities in big cities that is convinient and reliable.
If we live in the center of the town the life will be difficult and easy to.The question is how can be difficult? and How can be it become easy? for exampe if a person lives in big city center appartment. He must will have more opputurnity and easy access to most of the things e.g, Shopping malls and barber shops,grocessary shops near their home. But on the other hand, the daily routine is difficult in a sense there life will be very easy and mostly they do not have enough time to spend.
On the other hand, People who lives on in apartment blocks they do not have enough space in their homes. They have 2 to 3 rooms and
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response only partially addresses the prompt and fails to meet the minimum length requirement, containing only 151 words instead of the required 250. The student attempts to discuss living in tall apartment blocks by mentioning convenience and accessibility, such as proximity to 'Shopping malls and barber shops,grocessary shops', but the ideas remain very limited and under-developed. Furthermore, the writing trails off mid-sentence at the end ('They have 2 to 3 rooms and'), leaving the argument completely unresolved. To improve toward the next band, the student must write a complete essay that fully explores both sides of the argument with extended, fully supported examples and adhere strictly to the word count minimum.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text displays some basic organizational structure with rudimentary transitional phrases like 'In my opinion' and 'On the other hand', but it lacks an overall clear progression. Paragraphing is attempted, but the final paragraph breaks off abruptly. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and cohesive devices are inadequate or used repetitively, such as the repeated use of 'On the other hand'. To achieve a higher band, the writer needs to ensure that every paragraph contains a complete, logically developed idea, and that cohesive devices are used smoothly and accurately to connect sentences and paragraphs without mechanical repetition.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, featuring frequent word-choice and spelling errors such as 'convinient', 'appartment', 'opputurnity', and 'grocessary'. While the student attempts some less common words, noticeable errors in spelling and collocation indicate a limited range that struggles to convey precise meaning. To reach the next level, the writer must expand their lexical repertoire, learn accurate spelling of common topic-related vocabulary, and demonstrate a greater ability to use less common lexical items with appropriate collocations and minimal errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical range is very limited, relying heavily on simple sentence structures alongside faulty attempts at complex sentences. There are frequent errors in verb forms, articles, punctuation, and sentence boundaries, such as run-on sentences and missing capitalization ('block.In my opinion, If we build...'). For instance, the phrase 'He must will have more opputurnity' demonstrates poor control over modal and auxiliary verbs. To move up to the next band, the student needs to develop better control over basic sentence construction, reduce the frequency of grammatical errors, and successfully incorporate a wider variety of error-free complex structures.
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