Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In large cities housing, shortage is a major problem of individuals. thats the problem of expensive lands, mostly peoples can,t afford the area. in large cities, the major reason of to build tall apartments many residence can,t buy this place thats the reason to much expensive .

the advantages of tall block apartments, to save lands in cities ,likewise in karachi ,lahore ,islambad lands is much expensive and limited. Tall buildings, almost hundred to above peoples easily survive, on the same land . cheeper for government, because , one building ,needs one water line , one electricity. connection . because the reason per cost of bill is much low. close to job people can easily stay in this cities. and then easily to go work no long travel.

Disadvantages, quality of life issuance tall blocks, crowded, noisy, no parks, to fresh, air. peoples with skill,suffer .can creat slums in the sky, better alternative exist covert old empty buildings, convert old empty buildings/and offices, in to homes. Buid affordable houses on cheeper land. outside ares with good metro station. government intrest are low in this areas.loan to help peoples buy

homes .

indivduals can affordable lands easly to survive this places. tall apartment block way.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt partially by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of tall apartment blocks, but the ideas remain limited and under-developed. For instance, the mention of infrastructure benefits like 'one water line' is a relevant point, but it lacks sufficient explanation or extension. Furthermore, the student's position on the issue is not entirely clear throughout the response. Additionally, the length requirement is not met, as the text contains only 204 words, falling short of the 250-word minimum. To reach a higher level, the writer needs to fully develop all parts of the task with well-supported arguments and meet the minimum word count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation in the text, with an attempt to separate ideas into paragraphs covering problems, advantages, disadvantages, and alternatives. However, there is no clear overall progression from start to finish. Cohesive devices are generally inadequate, inaccurate, or missing altogether, relying heavily on disjointed phrases and comma splices rather than logical connectors (such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'on the other hand'). Referencing is also sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of arguments. To improve, the writer must use a wider range of cohesive devices accurately and ensure each paragraph has a clear thematic progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for discussing the topic of housing and cities, featuring basic terms like 'big', 'homes', and 'money'. There are noticeable lexical errors, such as 'cheeper' instead of cheaper, 'issuance' instead of issues, and awkward phrasing like 'slums in the sky'. These errors and spelling mistakes cause some difficulty for the reader and impede smooth communication. To achieve a higher band, the writer needs to use a broader range of vocabulary with greater precision, improve spelling accuracy, and incorporate more natural collocations relevant to academic topics.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writing displays a very limited range of structures, consisting mostly of simple sentences and fragments. Attempts at complex sentences are faulty, often resulting in severe punctuation errors such as frequent comma splices and misplaced commas (e.g., 'mostly peoples can,t afford the area'). There are frequent errors in verb forms, plurals, articles, and sentence construction that cause constant difficulty for the reader and obscure the intended meaning. To progress, the writer must focus on basic sentence construction, reduce punctuation errors, and build a reliable foundation of grammatical accuracy before attempting complex structures.

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