Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

in large cities is tu build enough homes and tall apartment blocks because many pepoel live in a bigs cities and its imposible to living in a village or a big home so logicaly stay in apartment it is not expensive like a big home but in the apartment its disagree for a big family like a 5 to a 10 human but it is agree for a couples or a new marrid and we can say its very good idea for a studant my opinion is if one day I lived soule for sure I prefer to rein a mini apartment or a mini studio but if I decided married I wish to make a big house me and my futur husband because I see its more stabilty grew my futur kids in a village not in a cities

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

Your response responds to the task only minimally. You have not met the minimum length requirement of 250 words, as your text contains only 140 words. While you briefly touch upon the prompt by stating that tall apartment blocks are suitable for couples, students, and new marriages rather than large families, your position is not fully explained or extended. To reach a higher level, you need to write a complete essay of at least 250 words, providing well-developed arguments and relevant examples regarding the advantages and disadvantages of tall apartment blocks in large cities.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The information and ideas are not arranged coherently. The entire response is written as a single, long run-on sentence without proper paragraphing, punctuation, or capitalization at the beginning of sentences and proper nouns. There is a lack of logical progression, and cohesive devices are virtually absent, making the flow difficult to follow. For instance, transitioning abruptly from discussing students to your personal opinion ("my opinion is if one day I lived soule...") lacks structural markers. To improve, you must organise your writing into clear paragraphs (introduction, body, conclusion) and use basic cohesive devices to connect your ideas logically.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic and repetitive vocabulary, and there are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors that strain the reader. Examples of errors include "pepoel" for people, "bigs" for big, "imposible" for impossible, "logicaly" for logically, "rein" for rent, "soule" for solo, and "futur" for future. Your vocabulary range is limited to everyday words like "big", "home", "apartment", and "good idea". To achieve a higher score, you need to incorporate a wider range of less common vocabulary and ensure that your spelling and word forms are accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Your writing shows a very limited range of grammatical structures, and errors are frequent throughout the text, sometimes distorting meaning. You rely heavily on simple clauses linked repetitively by conjunctions like "because" and "but" without proper terminal punctuation. There are multiple issues with verb forms, infinitives, and prepositions, such as "is tu build" instead of 'is to build', "its imposible to living" instead of 'it is impossible to live', and "decided married" instead of 'decided to get married'. To improve, you must practice using full sentences with correct punctuation, varied sentence structures, and accurate verb tenses.

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