Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I strongly agree with this statement the right way to give homes other as a foam of apartement because it occupies less space and live more peoples instead of in your own house.Moreover its have a positive impact on our society.

First of all it has a great impact on peoples and society it become more love loyalty between peoples.Its the way to help each other beacause peoples are living with each other or living nearby rooms.For instance,my aunt uncle live in a apartement and when they need some helps their apartement fellows help them with polietness, and still kind with each other

Furthermore,mostly apartment build commercial areas it have many options to buy things like food ,clothes,or our basic necessary but in neighbour or in street i may be difficult to go out in night.For example,my neiece is living in America and they live in apartment when she come back home in night after doing job she is easily take anything in anytime.

Moreover,its the way we occupies less space and live more people instead of when we live house or we live alone .Aloneliness cause anxiety ,depression and damage our mental health.

Further more we provide homes or apartment in less installement and our government should give every person with food,and speacially home or apartment.The right way to give ressidence to everyone is to build apartments so more people can easily survive there.

In conclusion,I strongly agree with this native in which many peoples get this facilities and live in your own residence without any disturbance and also spread love in a society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the task only partially, presenting a position that is somewhat clear regarding agreement with building tall apartment blocks, but the main ideas are limited and under-developed. For instance, the writer attempts to introduce points about community spirit, commercial convenience, space efficiency, and mental health benefits, but these ideas remain underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting evidence or logical extension. Examples provided, such as the aunt and uncle in an apartment or the niece in America, are anecdotal and brief, lacking deeper analysis of how tall apartment blocks specifically solve urban housing shortages. To move to a higher level, the writer needs to fully extend and support each main point with well-developed explanations and relevant global examples rather than relying on brief personal assertions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation with paragraphing used to separate distinct points, but the text lacks a clear overall progression. Cohesive devices are frequently inadequate, inaccurate, or repetitive, such as the overuse of transitional phrases like 'Moreover' and 'Furthermore' to start multiple paragraphs without establishing a smooth logical flow between ideas. Referencing is also unclear at times, making the connections between sentences strained. For example, sentences like 'Moreover,its the way we occupies less space and live more people instead of when we live house or we live alone' disrupt the logical progression. To improve, the writer must use a wider and more accurate range of cohesive devices, ensure clear referencing throughout, and build a more logical progression of ideas from introduction to conclusion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task, featuring noticeable errors that frequently cause difficulty for the reader and impede smooth communication. There are numerous word choice and word form errors, such as using 'foam' instead of 'form', 'apartement', 'polietness', 'necessary' instead of 'necessities', 'neiece', 'installement', 'ressidence', and 'native' instead of 'notion'. These lexical inaccuracies restrict the precision of the argument. To achieve a higher score, the writer must expand their vocabulary range, use less common lexical items with greater awareness of collocation and style, and significantly improve spelling and word formation accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writing demonstrates a very limited range of structures, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that are frequently faulty. There are frequent errors in grammar, punctuation, and article usage that can cause difficulty for the reader, such as subject-verb agreement issues in 'its have a positive impact', missing articles in 'after doing job', incorrect prepositions, and run-on sentences with poor punctuation control as seen in 'First of all it has a great impact on peoples and society it become more love loyalty between peoples.' Attempts at complex sentence structures often result in grammatical breakdown. To progress, the writer needs to demonstrate a greater variety of complex structures with higher accuracy, ensuring that the majority of sentences are free from basic errors.

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