Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

As the population in the cities increases, providing housing has become a significant challenge. Some people argue that constructing high-rise buliding is the only solution to provide accomadation to everyone. I agree with the statement that constructing tall buliding is only solution to provide better stay to the imgrantes.

On the one hand, people believe that constructing tall buliding is the only solution to provide places to the individuals. As the pepole are sifting towards the cities or towns for jobs, better life style ans many more working or personal purpose, they need place to live, so buliding tall buliding blocks is only solution. For example, construction of tall building with some with stitudo appratements for the people who live alone, 2 or 3bhk apartments for families person who lives with there family, with garden, proper mall, pharmacy and proper parking.

On the other hand, the significant reason to build tall apartment blocks. In big cities rate of land is very high even the area is well orgnaised or having all faculity and sortage of land also increases. If goverment construte the bulinding it give place to the people who came for job profile with good space or according to there income.

In conculsion, the buliding apartment blocks in big cities decrease the defforestation and iprovide

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response addresses the task only partially and fails to meet the minimum length requirement, being well under the 250-word threshold at 216 words. While a position is stated in the introduction, the development of ideas remains very limited and superficial. For instance, the second body paragraph trails off into an incomplete thought ('On the other hand, the significant reason to build tall apartment blocks'), and the essay ends abruptly mid-sentence in the conclusion ('In conculsion, the buliding apartment blocks in big cities decrease the defforestation and iprovide'). To reach a higher level, you must write the full required word count and fully develop your supporting arguments with clear examples rather than listing fragments of ideas.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation with introduction, body, and conclusion paragraphs, but the text lacks an overall clear progression. Cohesive devices are used very mechanically or are missing entirely, leading to abrupt transitions between sentences. For example, using 'On the one hand' followed immediately by another 'On the other hand' without a proper contrasting viewpoint disrupts the logical flow of the argument. Furthermore, referencing is unclear in places, such as 'with some with stitudo appratements'. To improve, you should ensure that paragraphs are distinct, logical, and connected with a wider variety of appropriate cohesive markers that guide the reader smoothly through your arguments.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is limited and barely adequate for the task, featuring frequent spelling and word-form errors that impede communication. Words like 'buliding', 'accomadation', 'imgrantes', 'pepole', 'sifting', 'stitudo', 'appratements', 'orgnaised', 'faculity', 'sortage', 'construte', 'conculsion', and 'defforestation' demonstrate a heavy reliance on basic vocabulary with severe spelling inaccuracies. To achieve a higher band, you need to expand your lexical range, learn the correct spelling of common academic words, and demonstrate control over word formation and collocations without letting errors obscure your meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writing demonstrates a very limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent errors that cause difficulty for the reader. There are persistent problems with subject-verb agreement, articles, plurals, and prepositions, such as 'constructing high-rise buliding' instead of 'buildings', and 'families person who lives with there family'. Attempts at complex structures are often faulty and incomplete, particularly noticeable at the end of the response where sentences break off entirely. To progress, you should focus on increasing your grammatical accuracy, ensuring correct punctuation, and mastering basic sentence structures before attempting more complex patterns.

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