Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Their is a good idea to urange high number of homes by building horizonatl apartments rethir than vertical homes.

Firsly their are is no land available to build the homes if we are going to build not towers for residance there will be less space of agricultural which effect on over all community. There is good idea to build tall apartment blocks for the public specially in cities, Other wise cities will grow very fast and everyone would love to have there own land to build the house.

Secoundly there is an envoiremental effect, if we focous to build home on land not the towar we have to cut trees which means we are going against the envoiremant. we should focous on the overall envoiremental raither than personal benifits.

Thirdly there are alot of people they have mind set that if we are not building

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You take a position in favour of tall apartment blocks, and the points about preserving agricultural land and avoiding tree removal are relevant to the question. However, the response addresses the task only partially: the reasons are stated briefly rather than explained with examples or consequences, and the final point beginning “Thirdly” is unfinished. The opening also says “horizonatl apartments,” which makes your position difficult to interpret before the later support for towers clarifies it. The response is 145 words, below the required 250, so there is not enough development to show a complete argument. State your degree of agreement clearly, then explain each reason and support it with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic sequence of points, signalled by “Firsly,” “Secoundly,” and “Thirdly,” and the ideas about land and trees are broadly connected to your position. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the first point shifts between limited land, agricultural space, towers, and people wanting their own land without clearly showing how these ideas relate. The paragraphing is also absent, and the final sentence stops mid-idea, leaving the organisation incomplete. Use separate paragraphs for your position, each main reason, and the conclusion. Link each point with clear cause-and-effect explanations rather than relying mainly on ordinal markers.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt some topic-related vocabulary, including “agricultural,” “environmental,” “residance,” and “personal benefits,” which shows an effort to discuss urban housing and its effects. However, spelling errors are frequent and sometimes make the intended meaning harder to identify, as in “urange,” “horizonatl,” “rethir,” and “envoiremental.” Some expressions are also imprecise or unnatural, such as “high number of homes” and “there is a good idea.” Use accurate, direct phrases such as “increase the housing supply” and “building high-rise apartments.” Proofread spelling carefully and choose vocabulary that expresses your meaning precisely; this will make your relevant ideas easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “if” and “which means,” and the reader can generally identify your main argument. However, sentence structures are often faulty or incomplete. In “if we are going to build not towers … there will be less space,” the conditional construction is awkward, while “Thirdly there are alot of people they have mind set” contains an unclear clause structure and is left unfinished. There are also recurring problems with agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries, as in “their are is no land” and the comma splice in “There is good idea …, Other wise.” Practise complete, controlled sentences and check that each clause has a clear subject and verb.

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