Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

An increasing number of people believe that the best way to provide enough houses in large cities is by constructing taller buildings. This concept is a double-edged sword. While it has lots of pros, I disagree with this statement. In my personal opinion, the cons are on a larger scale than pros.

On positive side, building taller buildings will result in more homes. Consequently, it will lead to more facillities. For instance, those people who live far from their workplace, can easily find an apartment near their workplace. Thus, saving time and the expence of travel. Furthermore, recent research ellaborates that, the workers who live near their workplace, perform better in comparision to those who live in distance. Additinally, it is mentioned that daily travel leads to less energy and time for work. Thus, if more apartments are avalible near the workplace, the workers wont have to travel. Consequentliy, leaving more time and energy for work. Additionally, traval expences would also be decreased.

On the other hand, constructing tall apartment blocks would raise more security concerns. The statistices demonstrates that, the taller the building is the higher is its risk of crashing down. In addition, more apartment would lead to more people getting encouraged to leave their homes in countrysides, and buying a small apartment in the city to get more facillities. This raise in demand would lead to a massive raise in the rent and price of apartments. For instance, HongKong is the best live example of this phenomena. Its huge buildings lead to a misconseption that one can easily find apartment to live in. However, the raise of demand have lead to a massive growth in its population and the price of the rent. Thus, most people in HongKong are homeless and spending nights in resturents and parks as a result. In addition, it is really difficult to empty taller buildings in the case of emergency. For example, is case of fire, it is nearly impossible to rescue the people on the top floor within time. More apartment means more people.

In conclusion, government should focus one providing more facillities in the countryside area, instead of building tall apartment blocks. In case of emergency, these buildings would lead to enormus destruction.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the introduction: you disagree because you consider the disadvantages greater than the advantages. You address both sides, giving relevant points about access to workplaces, safety, housing costs and emergency evacuation, and the Hong Kong example helps illustrate your concern about demand and prices. This meets the task well, and the argument shows some development beyond simply listing points. However, several claims are asserted rather than explained—for example, that taller buildings are more likely to collapse, and that most Hong Kong residents are homeless. The countryside proposal in the conclusion is also introduced without being developed in the main argument. Explain the evidence or reasoning behind these claims and connect each example more directly to whether high-rise construction is the best solution to housing shortages.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for advantages and disadvantages, and a conclusion. The contrast between “On positive side” and “On the other hand” makes the broad direction easy to follow, and examples are generally placed beside the points they support. However, progression within the first body paragraph is weakened by repeated links such as “Thus,” “Additionally,” and “Consequently,” which sometimes make the ideas feel like a list rather than a connected explanation. The shift from workplace access to research claims could be smoother, and the conclusion’s focus on countryside facilities is not clearly prepared for earlier. Use fewer, more precise linking phrases and organise each paragraph around one main claim, followed by explanation and a relevant example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “security concerns,” “demand,” “rent,” “emergency,” and “rescue,” and phrases such as “double-edged sword” show an attempt to use less common language. However, the range and control are limited by repeated general words such as “more,” “raise,” and “facilities,” as well as inaccurate or unnatural combinations: “raise more security concerns,” “the best live example,” and “a massive growth in its population.” Numerous spelling errors—including “facillities,” “expence,” “ellaborates,” and “availible”—are noticeable and reduce the overall accuracy of vocabulary. Aim for more precise housing and urban-planning terms, check spelling carefully, and learn common collocations so your meaning sounds natural as well as clear.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex forms, including a concession in “While it has lots of pros, I disagree” and conditional phrasing such as “In case of fire.” Most of the argument remains understandable, but some sentence structures and punctuation are faulty. For example, “Thus, saving time and the expence of travel” is a fragment, while “those people who live far from their workplace, can” has an unnecessary comma separating the subject from the verb. There are also errors in agreement and sentence construction, as in “the raise of demand have lead” and “the taller the building is the higher is its risk.” Practise forming complete sentences and checking subject–verb agreement, articles and clause punctuation; this will make your varied structures more reliable.

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