Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This essay described the ultimate way to facilitates the communities with their homes in large cities is to construct tall apartments sectors. It is appropriate path to provide the people with immensive innovation in life style by giving them a chance to live in facilitated cities and give them benefits from cities.

The most crutial reason is education because students in villages are like to have less benefits and opportunity as compared to the students in cities. As long as they get home at suitable cost in big cities the literacy rate will rocked. Although it also depands upon intelligence of students but mostly students get stucked in the undeveloped area while they have ability to light up their future. For instance, Erasmundus Schloarship has many examples of such students as it has most Pakistani graduates.

Moreover, healh and medical treatment is the second most important feature that support my statement. Better health treatment means better healthy society. By giving homes in tall building we can adjust as many floks as we want and give them perfect health facilities. Alot of patients died ever year on their way to hospitals from such backward area. In addition, all modern and developed cities have apartments for familes in the tall buildings. For examples, Burj Khalifa provides more home space as compared to whole city.

To conclude that, it can not be wrong in saying that providing home to many indiviuals on same area is building tall apartments blocks is the most favourable choice.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You take a position in favour of tall apartment blocks and give two supporting themes: access to education and healthcare. These are relevant to city living, and the scholarship example attempts to illustrate how access to urban opportunities may help students. However, the response only partially develops the actual housing argument. It does not explain clearly why building upwards is the best way to provide enough homes, or compare this approach with alternatives such as expanding suburbs or renovating existing housing. The links between affordable homes, literacy, and medical outcomes are also asserted rather than explained; for example, “the literacy rate will rocked” does not show how apartment construction produces that result. Develop a clear chain of reasoning and support it with a specific, relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “The most crucial reason” and “Moreover,” and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the main points. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes unclear because several ideas are joined without explaining their relationship. The education paragraph moves from village students to housing costs and then to a scholarship, while the healthcare paragraph shifts from apartment capacity to deaths during travel and the Burj Khalifa. Some linking phrases, such as “As long as” and “In addition,” do not make the intended connection precise. Use topic sentences focused on housing supply, then develop each point in a logical sequence with clear references and transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “literacy rate,” “medical treatment,” “health facilities,” and “apartments,” and some choices communicate the general subject. However, vocabulary control is limited by frequent spelling errors and inaccurate or unnatural word combinations. Examples include “immensive innovation,” “apartments sectors,” “floks,” and “perfect health facilities”; these make parts of the argument difficult to interpret. Several words also do not express the intended meaning precisely, such as “ultimate way” and “light up their future.” Build a more reliable set of collocations for housing and urban planning, and check spelling and word forms carefully. Prefer precise terms such as housing supply, affordable accommodation, and access to services.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a concessive clause beginning “Although” and a conditional structure with “As long as.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in basic sentence construction and agreement recur. For example, “This essay described … is to construct” mixes tenses and does not form a clear sentence; “the literacy rate will rocked” has an incorrect verb form; and “feature that support my statement” has a subject–verb agreement error. Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “providing home to many individuals.” These problems sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to follow. Practise building accurate subject–verb sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check each verb against its subject and tense.

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