Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The the new world era people belive that they can provide homes to the others in the big cities by building multi story homes.I tottaly disagree with this statment becsuse in the cities apartmejts are very rxpendive and not every one afford the apartments.I will discuss the resons in the upcoimg paragraphs.

Firstly, in my opinion ut is not good idea to bulid tall apartments in the cities because if the apartments build in the cities then the rent of these apartments are very high and normal people can not afford to living in the apartments because they can not afford.

Moreover, instead of making tall apartments they can proper sequre shape homes because tall apartments are very small it is very difficult to living more than two people becsuse tall apartments have less free space.

In conclusion, i think pepele needs to stay in the big houses instead of livinng in the apartments becsuse they are very small as well expensive.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear position—“I totally disagree”—and give relevant reasons about affordability and limited space in tall apartments. However, the response addresses the question only minimally: the reasons are asserted rather than explained or supported with examples, and the conclusion repeats the same points without adding a developed final judgement. The claim that apartments are expensive, for instance, needs explanation of how this affects the supply of homes or who would be unable to live there. The response also falls 88 words short of the required minimum, which leaves too little space to develop your argument. Add a further relevant reason or example and explain how each point supports your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall arrangement: an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “Firstly” and “Moreover,” and a conclusion. This makes the main direction easy to follow. However, progression within the paragraphs is limited, and some connections are mechanical or unclear. The first body paragraph repeats the affordability point (“can not afford” appears twice) rather than extending it. The second introduces space, but the link between “tall apartments” and homes being “very small” is not explained. Use each paragraph to develop one distinct reason, connect claims to explanations or examples, and avoid repeating the same idea. Clearer referencing and more varied linking would make the organisation feel less formulaic.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use basic vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “rent,” “apartments,” “free space,” and “big cities,” so the reader can identify your main concerns. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, especially “apartments” and “afford.” Frequent spelling errors—such as “belive,” “statment,” and “expensive” misspelled as “rxpendive”—also make the writing less clear and strain the reader. Some expressions are not natural or precise, including “proper sequre shape homes” and “the new world era.” Build a wider set of accurate housing-related terms and check spelling carefully. More precise phrasing would help you explain affordability and space without relying on repeated basic words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple sentences and longer clauses, for example, “I totally disagree … because…” and “if the apartments build in the cities then…”. However, the range remains very limited, and errors are frequent enough to sometimes distort meaning. Examples include “if the apartments build” instead of a correctly formed passive, “not every one afford” without subject–verb agreement, and “difficult to living” where the verb pattern is incorrect. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “not good idea” and the run-on opening sentence. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then add controlled complex sentences using “because,” “if,” and “although.” Proofread for verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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