Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, increasing the population in the world people living the very places in our earth. people making the apartment, small home for the propose of living. many people things that best wat to provide enough homes in large cities is to buil tall apartment blocks. I strongly agree this statement because of one cities have many types of things such as factories, office, residental area and goverment place that is not sufficent areas of enviroment for the people. However, build the tall apartment blocks and provides the people.

One of the main reason i agree this statement, if people are build tall apartment blocks many people lives their in the small place carry the buildings. while, the reamening place are used in the another things which are office, market and meditation area. more place are open around the enviroment people can enjoyand children are plays game. for instance, nepali poeple have create the suncity apartment in this place lives in many people in the certain areas and not crowd.

Another reason for agree this statement, residental area will be certain if create the apartment. moreover, people are live in ceertain area and crete the market and shopping area near the apartment areas. they can help the no sparde the pollution, crowded and people not alone feel. apartment has been create the job opportunites many people. many people are unity in the one apartment.

In conclusion, the best way to provide the anough homes in large cities is to buil tall apartment blocks. ia can be help in people unity, good relationdhips create the another people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear position in the opening and conclusion, stating that you strongly agree that tall apartment blocks can provide homes. The response also offers relevant reasons: concentrating residents may leave space for other uses, and nearby shops or shared housing may support community life. The Sun City example is a useful attempt to make the argument concrete. However, the task is only partly addressed because these points are not explained clearly or developed with convincing detail. For example, the claim that apartments reduce pollution and crowding is asserted rather than shown, and the example does not explain how the development solves a housing shortage. To strengthen the response, explain each reason step by step and acknowledge a limitation or alternative to tall buildings.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and each body paragraph signals a separate reason. Connectors such as “One of the main reason,” “Another reason” and “In conclusion” help identify the stages of the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow because several ideas are placed together without clear links. In the first body paragraph, the discussion moves from residents living in a small area to offices, markets, open space and children playing, but the relationship between these points is not consistently explained. Some linking words, including “while” and “moreover,” do not clearly express the intended connection. Use a topic sentence, then develop one point at a time with explicit cause-and-effect links and clearer references.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to housing and urban development, including “apartment blocks,” “residential area,” “pollution,” “crowded” and “job opportunities.” This gives the response a basic range for discussing the topic. However, vocabulary is repetitive and many word-choice, spelling and collocation errors make parts difficult to understand. Phrases such as “the reamening place,” “not sparde the pollution” and “people are unity” do not communicate the intended meaning clearly. Frequent misspellings, including “sufficent,” “enviroment” and “opportunites,” also reduce accuracy. Build a reliable set of topic phrases and check spelling and word forms; for example, use “remaining land,” “reduce pollution” and “residents can build a sense of community.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a conditional idea beginning “if people are build tall apartment blocks.” This shows an effort to express relationships between ideas, but the range remains limited and complex attempts are often faulty. Errors in verb forms and agreement occur throughout, as in “many people lives,” “children are plays” and “apartment has been create.” Articles and sentence construction are also frequently inaccurate, as in “the best way to provide the anough homes” and “One of the main reason i agree.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning hard to follow. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then build longer sentences using controlled clauses such as “If more residents live in apartments, land can be used for parks.”

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