Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Government is providing enogh houses to the migrants coiming towards the urban areas to fullfill their needs of life.This essay is agree disagree eassay aand will discuss both points either there is need of numerous numbers houses or to construct long bildings full of facilities.

On the one hand, I agree that the migrants who are coming towards cities for their modern life styles. The main reason is, obviously they require the latest facilities of life which can not be fullfill in rural areas. For example, the modern education, job apportunities, a perfect amount of saleries that have an impotant point to spend a perfect lifestyles. In addition, individuals are aiming for the good education and aminities which can paved their way and enhance the personailities of people can transform their lieves.

On the other hand, disadvantages outweigh the advantages as peoplr moving towars suburban areas. This will create mass, the reason is construction of houses will reduced. For example, this immigration will create the shortage of houses and are causing over crowded roads. In addition this crowd will cause destruction of important monouments and city infrastructure. Finaly their should be develope some adjustments according to rapid spread of public.

Governmebt needs to construct long building than numerous houses because the huge numbers of houses will create shortage of land. It will create more issues like over crowded roads, markets and streets. So it will disturb the enviroment of a contry too. Long building with too many appartments can deal with thses increasing issues. Furthermore. because of long building a community orgnization can facilitate society with latest aminities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the topic of housing in cities and give a final preference for tall buildings, noting that they use less land and can include amenities. However, the response only partially answers the question: the opening says the essay will discuss both sides, and the body considers migration and its effects more than whether tall apartment blocks are the best way to provide homes. The position is also difficult to follow because you first say you agree with migrants seeking city facilities, then state that disadvantages outweigh advantages, without clearly linking either point to the proposal. Develop a consistent degree of agreement and support it with specific explanations—for example, how apartment blocks increase housing capacity and what limitations they may have.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and phrases such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “Furthermore” signal relationships between ideas. However, progression is difficult to follow because the paragraphs do not consistently develop the central question. The first body paragraph focuses on migrants’ desire for education and jobs, while the second shifts to overcrowding and damage to monuments; the connection between these points and tall apartment blocks is not made clear. Some linking is also mechanical, and the conclusion introduces points without fully resolving the earlier discussion. Give each paragraph one clear purpose and use references and transitions to show how each reason supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “urban areas,” “shortage of houses,” “city infrastructure,” and “apartments,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning unclear, such as “a perfect amount of salaries,” “create mass,” and “long building.” Spelling errors are also frequent, including “enogh,” “apportunities,” and “enviroment,” and they reduce the clarity and accuracy of the message. Aim for precise, natural phrases used in housing discussions, and check spelling carefully. For instance, describe “high-rise apartment blocks” and explain that they can “accommodate more residents on limited land,” rather than relying on vague expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a reason introduced by “The main reason is” and a sentence beginning “because of long building.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence formation, agreement, articles and verb forms sometimes make the intended meaning hard to follow. For example, “Government is providing” lacks a clear article or plural subject, while “construction of houses will reduced” has an incorrect verb form. The opening sentence also runs several ideas together without clear grammatical links. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses with correct verb forms and punctuation. Proofread each sentence to ensure it has a clear subject and complete verb.

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