Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Build Tall Apartment Blocks

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks. I'm totally agree this statement because in my opinion, if we build a tall apartment it helps to deforestation , reduce the pollutions and to make clean and healthy environment.

The biggest reason of deforestation is the unbalanced stable people and the population growth. If the population growth is increase day by day we need to cut the trees and build a house. If we make tall apartment we have a lot of place fro living. It helps to reduce polution and make healthy environment and relexed atmosphare. Likewise, it helps to protect water sources, animals, birds and living organism.

Environment have own rules and regulation, if we protect environment, environment helps to improve out beimg human lives.For example, In modern era we polluted the environment and we are facing different kinds of diseases like covid-19. Which, was killled millions of people in a short period.

If we build tall apartment it makes beautiful town or cities and it is take aquite a bit land and it fill thousands of people living and reduce the number of house.For example. I'm from nepal which is a beautiful and peaceful country in the world. In city area, we can see different and short building which helps to make dirty city.

Overall, i'd like to talk tall apartment is good throught because it helps stable human lifes and protect us and environment. It helps to reduce snow fall, floods etc.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a clear position in favour of tall apartment blocks and give related reasons, including using less land and accommodating more residents. However, the response only partly addresses the question of whether this is the best way to provide homes: much of the discussion shifts to environmental benefits, and the link between apartment construction and claims about disease, floods, or snowfall is unclear or unsupported. The Nepal example mentions short buildings but does not explain how this demonstrates that tall blocks are the best solution. The response contains 241 words, so it is 9 words below the required minimum; the 16 words copied from the prompt are excluded. Develop the housing argument with specific, relevant examples and explain why alternatives are less effective.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, several body paragraphs, and a concluding statement, and it uses basic linking expressions such as “Likewise,” “For example,” and “Overall.” These give the reader some sense of structure. However, progression is difficult to follow because several paragraphs move between housing, deforestation, health, and environmental protection without clearly connecting those points to the central argument. Some links are also unclear, such as the transition from pollution to COVID-19. The conclusion repeats the general position but does not draw together the main reasons. Organise each body paragraph around one housing-related reason, then use a clear explanation or example to connect it to your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “population growth,” “environment,” “water sources,” and “tall apartment,” so the basic subject is identifiable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make ideas unclear, for example “unbalanced stable people,” “a lot of place fro living,” and “it helps stable human lifes.” Spelling errors such as “polution,” “relexed,” and “atmosphare” are also noticeable and can distract the reader. Aim for precise phrases that describe housing and urban planning, and check spelling carefully. For instance, explain that high-rise buildings can house more people on a smaller area of land rather than relying on vague environmental claims.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple sentences and longer clauses, including conditional forms such as “If we build tall apartment…” and a relative clause beginning “Which…”. However, the longer structures are often faulty, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries frequently make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “I'm totally agree,” “the population growth is increase,” “Environment have own rules,” and “it is take aquite a bit land.” The sentence beginning “Which, was killled…” is also incomplete. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then build longer sentences with one clear main clause and correctly formed supporting clauses. Review subject–verb agreement, articles, and past-tense forms.

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