Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

I am totally disagree with this statement. To provide enough homes building a tall apartment blocks is become danger for the citizens in some situations like earthquakes. If we built a tall apartment and suddenly an earthquake appears, in this situation we should ask people to go such places where danger of being dead is less, but if someone live at 15th floor and there is no safe place for him or her then what should he do to save himself and his family. Furthermore, short circuit happens in buildings and catches fire. In all situations this is unsafe for the people to stay in a tall buildings. But to some extent, I agree to this statement that building a tall apartment don't take more space. It provides more facilities to a lot of people at a single place. People don't need to be stressed or tensed in search of a better place to live. This is the advantage of this idea. But according to countries economy, some countries in Asia take more expensive rent and prices of these apartments. It will be another problematic situation for those citizens who are unemployed or having job with less salary. They want to live in a better place in a best area but due to their high expenses they can't afford them. I thought everyone should stay in a same place with affordable expenses nonone can be burdenized. That's why I am totally disagree to this statement. I think you should focus on these points and make a better plan.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall disagreement and address both the benefits and drawbacks of tall apartment blocks. The points about earthquake and fire risks, efficient use of space, and affordability are relevant to the question. However, the discussion is only partly developed: the safety concerns rely on hypothetical questions rather than explaining how building design or emergency planning affects the issue, and the affordability point is not clearly connected to whether tall blocks are the best way to provide enough homes. Your position also shifts when you say you agree “to some extent,” before returning to total disagreement. To strengthen the response, state a consistent degree of agreement and explain each main reason with a specific example or comparison with another housing approach.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable sequence: it presents risks, acknowledges advantages, then discusses cost and concludes with disagreement. Linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “But,” and “That’s why” help signal these moves. However, the ideas are largely placed in one continuous paragraph, so the reader has little visual guidance, and the progression between points is sometimes abrupt. For example, the move from space-saving benefits to rent in Asian countries is not explained, while the final sentence, “I think you should focus on these points,” addresses the reader rather than concluding the argument. Use separate paragraphs for your position, supporting reasons, and conclusion, and make the relationship between each point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “earthquakes,” “short circuit,” “facilities,” “unemployed,” and “affordable expenses.” Some phrases also show an attempt to express more specific concepts, such as “a better place to live.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are unnatural or unclear, including “danger of being dead,” “catches fire,” and “burdenized.” Repetition of “people,” “place,” and “situation” also limits precision. Aim to use more natural housing and safety vocabulary, and check whether phrases express the intended meaning clearly. For instance, “risk of death,” “a fire breaks out,” and “financially burdened” would communicate these ideas more appropriately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including conditional structures such as “if someone live at 15th floor” and a contrast between disadvantages and advantages. This shows an effort to vary sentence forms, but errors are frequent and sometimes make the reader pause. Examples include “I am totally disagree,” “building a tall apartment blocks is become danger,” and “some countries in Asia take more expensive rent.” There are also problems with subject–verb agreement, articles, plurals, and verb forms, as in “someone live” and “a tall buildings.” Practise building accurate basic clauses first, then combine them with controlled conditionals and contrast clauses. Proofread each sentence for a clear subject, correctly formed verb, and matching singular or plural nouns.

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