Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The good way to offer sufficient housing in big cities is to construct highted apartments blocks. I totally agree with this statement that this is best way people live in apartments not live in socities. The government should focus on making apartments.

To begin, this is best solution that we are save our natural beauty because everyday people build new houses for living. Furthermore, government should banned on building new houses the reason behind this statement is id everyone making own houses then they effect agriculture. We have no more save to grow plants, vegetables and fruits. For example, if agriculture disturbed then people who eat it because we have no more fields that grew crops and other things. Lastly, intellegent people taking stress because there is know that after some years we faced a lot of difficulties in future.

Secondly, I think government should first priority that they save their land and that build apartments blocks. If a family need 300 metere square house the chose to erefer live in apartment not live in their house because in one tall apartments 300 almost families living in a specific society. But the homes used more space. For instance, people should perefer to living in a apartments not the living in houses. If we do not take these types of initiate after some years our children faced more difficulties.

To sum up, the essay show the advantages od build apartments and explain the disadvantages of houses and exaplin their pros and cons. In my personal aspect is their is good way bilding new apartments and destroying houses.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You state a clear overall view in the opening—“I totally agree”—and your two body paragraphs give relevant reasons: apartment blocks could preserve land for agriculture and accommodate many families in a smaller area. However, the response addresses the task only partially because these points are asserted rather than explained in a clear, convincing way. For example, the link between building houses and losing farmland is difficult to follow, and the claim that “intelligent people” will face stress is not developed or connected clearly to the argument. The conclusion supports apartment construction but introduces “destroying houses,” a stronger proposal than the task requires. Develop each reason with a clear explanation and a specific, relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “To begin” and “Secondly,” and a concluding paragraph. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear: the first body paragraph moves from natural beauty to government restrictions, agriculture, and stress without showing how each point connects. Linking phrases such as “Furthermore,” “Lastly,” and “For example” are used, but they do not always establish a clear relationship between the ideas that follow. The conclusion also repeats the general position rather than bringing the main reasons together. Use a more focused topic sentence in each body paragraph, then explain and illustrate that single main idea in a logical sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “agriculture,” “fields,” “crops,” “apartments,” and “families,” so the main subject is generally identifiable. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or misspelled expressions make parts of the argument difficult to understand. Examples include “highted apartments blocks,” “socities,” “intellegent,” and “perefer.” Some word combinations are also unnatural, such as “save our natural beauty” and “take these types of initiate.” These errors sometimes obscure your intended meaning, which is why vocabulary control is not yet reliable. Build a bank of accurate housing and urban-planning phrases, and check spelling and collocations carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional idea beginning “if agriculture disturbed,” but complex structures are often faulty and the range remains limited. Errors in verb forms and sentence construction occur frequently: “this is best solution that we are save” and “if agriculture disturbed then people who eat it” do not form clear, complete clauses. Articles, agreement, and plurals are also inconsistent, as in “in one tall apartments” and “a apartments.” These problems can make the reader work to understand your meaning. Practise building accurate basic sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “if,” and “which.” Check that every sentence has a clear subject and correctly formed verb.

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