Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-11
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In this contemporary era, growing urbanization bring multiple benefits with significant drawbacks, while numerous individual argues that the best measure is build skyscrappers to tackle the living problem of rising population in urban cities. I firmly agree with this view because investing funds to build high-rise building infrastructures has some significant benefits- such as less ground occupation and multiple homes under one roof.
People who believe that the tall apartment blocks is a significant solution to resolve the growing population and basic needs for
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0
You state a clear position—“I firmly agree”—and give two relevant reasons: tall buildings use less ground and can provide multiple homes in one structure. These points show an understanding of the topic, but the response stops before either reason is explained or supported with an example. The second paragraph begins a relevant point about population and basic needs but is unfinished, so the task is addressed only minimally rather than developed into a complete argument. The response also falls substantially short of the required 250 words, leaving the question’s demands unmet. To improve, explain how high-rise housing increases capacity in a limited urban area, consider a relevant example, and complete the essay with a developed conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The opening presents a recognisable position and previews two supporting points, which gives the reader an initial sense of direction. However, the response is too incomplete to establish a coherent overall progression: the second paragraph ends abruptly at “basic needs for,” and there is no completed development or conclusion. The dash before “such as” also interrupts the sentence’s flow, while the transition from the introduction to the unfinished paragraph does not show how the ideas will be explained. Build a clear sequence of introduction, developed body paragraphs, and conclusion. Use linking phrases to show relationships between claims and examples, and ensure each paragraph forms a complete unit.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
You attempt topic-relevant vocabulary, including “urbanization,” “skyscrappers,” “high-rise building infrastructures,” and “ground occupation.” This shows an effort to discuss urban housing beyond very basic terms. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits clarity: “living problem” is vague, “build high-rise building infrastructures” is awkward, and “multiple individual argues” contains an incorrect word form. There is also a spelling error in “skyscrappers.” Aim for precise, natural collocations such as “housing shortage,” “construct high-rise apartment buildings,” and “residents.” Because the response is brief, it offers little evidence of a wider range of vocabulary or flexible use across the argument.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The opening attempts a complex sentence with a contrast clause (“while numerous individual argues…”), and the response includes a reason clause introduced by “because.” These show some willingness to use more than simple sentence patterns. However, errors in agreement and sentence construction are noticeable: “growing urbanization bring” should use a singular verb, and “numerous individual argues” needs a plural noun and matching verb. The phrase “the best measure is build” also lacks the required infinitive form. The final sentence is incomplete, ending with “for,” so the reader cannot follow the intended grammatical structure. Practise checking subject–verb agreement and verb patterns, and make sure every sentence is complete before moving on.
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