Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Nowadays, the better path to provide houses in huge cities to build all apartment blocks is an important topic. some people believe that the large cities are a benefit to the cities were buid in the school, hospital, and the other thing. however, others have a different opinion , in my opinion, i believe that the large cities is big benefits for several reasons. Firstly, one important reason is that the huge cities are the several things such as, the cities in school, the children are play in the school and the hospital, in the cities the patient will ill and the cities are near in the home. this is because for the communities is the best of the cities. for example, the guest will come and the shops are near in the home and the shop are still in the city as a result the cities are grown in the people. Secondly, another important point is that the larger city are still common in our society. this means that the cities are near the school and the children are play in the cities and the degrees in the large grow in your society. for examplethe cities are important in your own time and the wonderfull school, and the shops in my city. In conclusion, i believe that the path to provide the enough houses in huge cities is to build apartment blocks it has several advantages. in, my opinion people should understand its importance and make the right decisions.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You state a position in the introduction and conclusion: you support building apartment blocks. However, most of the response does not explain why tall blocks are the best way to provide enough homes. The discussion focuses instead on schools, hospitals, shops and the general benefits of cities, so the central housing issue is only minimally addressed. For example, “the cities are near the school” does not show how apartment buildings increase housing supply or why they are preferable to other options. The examples are also unclear and do not develop a reasoned argument. To strengthen your response, give relevant reasons—such as using limited land efficiently—and explain each with a specific example linked directly to the question.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Your response has an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “Firstly” and “Secondly,” and a conclusion, so there is an attempt to organise the answer. However, the ideas within and between paragraphs are difficult to follow, and the overall progression is not clear. The first body paragraph moves from schools to hospitals, guests and shops without showing how these points support apartment blocks. The second repeats that cities are near schools and that schools and shops are important, rather than adding a distinct argument. Linking phrases such as “this is because” and “as a result” are used, but the relationships they introduce are often unclear. Build each paragraph around one relevant claim, then explain and illustrate it in a logical sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “apartment blocks,” “provide houses,” “large cities,” and “communities,” and you attempt to express ideas about urban facilities. However, the vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or combinations make the meaning difficult to understand. Phrases such as “the cities are grown in the people” and “the degrees in the large grow in your society” do not communicate a clear idea. There are also spelling and word-form problems, including “buid” and “wonderfull.” Aim to use precise terms connected to the topic, such as housing supply, limited land, population density and residential buildings. Check that each chosen word fits naturally with the words around it.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the response includes basic connectors such as “because,” “however” and “for example.” Some sentence meanings can be understood, but control of sentence structure is inconsistent, and errors often make relationships between ideas unclear. For instance, “the children are play in the school” has an incorrect verb form, while “the large cities is big benefits” has problems with agreement and sentence construction. Capitalisation and punctuation are also unreliable, as in “however” after a full stop and “in, my opinion.” Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, checking agreement and verb forms, and separating clauses with accurate punctuation.

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