Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The unique route to offer mximum houses in big cities is to buildup tall apartment blocks. I strongly disagree with this statement of to provide enough homes in large citites is to made tall apartment blocks.

For some people this is good for them to live in the tall buildings who came from small cities or villages for searching job opportunity and doing work here with any frenchise and living alone far away from his family. Because, if he would stay with some other fellows in the building house definetily the rent of that home will be divided and among them moreover, easily can send rest of money to his home for his children and family.

I totally disgree with this beacuse what for those people who permanenly live in big cities with their old parents whose have diffrent types of diseases like joint pain, asthma and other problems such as. They can not to go to the last floor of building with that problems. For instance, once my friend has invited me on dinner with my family in his home, His house was located in the big city and his apartment on the third floor of the building and lift was not working well. Due to this, my parents faced too much trouble for rreaching his apartment with stairs. That day i realised, to live in the big cities building is not easy and thanked to God He give me my own house .

consequently, to made tall apartment block is not good idea. Instead, they should make more houses on ground floor mostly with conserved space and decorated it with furnishid thing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You state a clear disagreement in the opening and return to it in the conclusion, so your position is identifiable. The example about your parents struggling to reach a third-floor apartment also gives a relevant reason to question tall blocks. However, the response only partly addresses the central issue of how best to provide enough homes: the first body paragraph describes why some workers might share a flat, but does not explain whether this makes tall blocks the best solution. The alternative of building ground-floor homes is asserted rather than supported, and the discussion of older residents is not balanced against the need to accommodate many people in cities. Develop two focused reasons and explain how each supports your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a concluding sentence. The personal example is placed in the paragraph about accessibility, which helps the reader follow that point. However, progression between ideas is often unclear: the first body paragraph begins with “For some people this is good” but then shifts to disagreeing without explaining the connection. Linking expressions such as “Because,” “moreover,” and “consequently” are sometimes used mechanically or do not show the intended relationship. Some sentences also combine several ideas, making the argument difficult to track. Use clearer topic sentences, keep each paragraph focused on one reason, and connect examples explicitly to the claim they support.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to housing and city life, including “apartment blocks,” “rent,” “job opportunity,” and “joint pain.” These choices make the general subject understandable. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or misspelled expressions make the writing less clear, such as “mximum houses,” “frenchise,” “permanenly,” and “conserved space.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “building house” and “send rest of money to his home.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms such as “housing supply,” “high-rise apartments,” and “accessible accommodation” would help you express the argument more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional idea about sharing rent and a sentence introducing a personal example. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to understand. For example, “I strongly disagree with this statement of to provide enough homes … is to made” has an unclear construction and incorrect verb form; “whose have different types of diseases” also has incorrect relative-clause structure and agreement. Other examples include “They can not to go” and “they should make … and decorated it,” where verb forms do not fit the sentence. Practise building accurate subject–verb sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking tense, agreement, articles and punctuation.

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