Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

I agree with best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks to haveing good life and living happy with live with family.

In my point i agree with provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks and it have safe environment not to occupied lands for homes take more area and no place to tree and animals. The main reson if everone have individual provide enough homes in large cities it make the big problem the main reson have space to trees and animals why becouse the place occupied with houses no place park and palyround no lakes and people have no good veiw. In my case if they provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks they so much place left and we can grow the tress and forest and not damageing animals homes and environment to keeping the safe and makeing the best world ecofriendly environment.

othercase some people disagree provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks . the people to live free live have with with no rule and live free they think to have the tall apartment blocks has make damage to environment for animals

in Conclusion best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks make the life better way to have to be improve with they to safe all live thing helping to live save to keeping good environment

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You state a clear position in favour of tall apartment blocks, and the points about preserving land for trees, parks and animals are relevant to the question. However, the response develops these ideas only briefly and repeats the same environmental benefit rather than explaining it with a specific example or fuller reasoning. The opposing view is mentioned, but “live free” and the claim that blocks damage the environment are not clearly explained or answered. The response also contains 184 words, so it is 66 words below the required minimum; 67 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. This limits how fully you can address and support your position. To strengthen the response, explain the housing benefit, develop one or two examples, and respond directly to the counterargument.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic overall structure: an opening position, supporting points, a brief opposing view and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify your general argument. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow because several ideas are joined together without clear sentence boundaries, and the environmental point is repeated in similar terms. Connectors such as “In my point,” “othercase” and “In Conclusion” are either unclear or used mechanically, while references such as “they” do not always make clear who is meant. Use separate paragraphs for your main argument and the opposing view, and organise each around one central point. Clearer linking phrases and explicit references would make the reasoning easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “environment,” “trees,” “animals,” “parks” and “apartment blocks,” so the reader can recognise your main subject and intended benefits. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and several phrases are difficult to understand because of inaccurate word choice or collocation. For example, “have good life,” “provide enough homes” and “damageing animals homes” do not express your ideas naturally. There are also spelling errors such as “reson,” “everone” and “veiw.” Build a more precise set of phrases for housing and urban planning, and check spelling. Replacing repeated general wording with terms such as “green space” or “housing demand” would help express your points more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

You attempt to communicate a position and give reasons, but most sentences rely on simple patterns, and attempts to combine several ideas often result in incomplete or difficult-to-follow structures. For example, “I agree with best way … is to build” lacks a grammatical construction after “agree,” while “the main reson if everone have individual … it make the big problem” has unclear clause structure and agreement. Articles and verb forms are also frequently missing or inaccurate, as in “it have safe environment” and “they so much place left.” These errors sometimes make the relationships between ideas hard to understand. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then add one supporting clause at a time; check articles, agreement and verb forms.

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