Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Mostly , it is believed that building tall apartment blocks in large cities to reside the locals is an effective solution perhaps , I completely disagree because overcrowded apartments evoke potential negative effects to the residents and have put huge pressure on infrastructure.

Those who lives in high - rise apartments with 100 of people from different background , lifestyle , attitudes could ultimately face mental challenges as most of the time a person is abide by rituals and customs and other may not like it or against that , interacting with such locals enforce negativity and rage. These emotions enforce psychological tension and limits social bonds.For instance , People from different religions living in a tall buildings together came to know something they may not like about one another and end up sharing good terms.

Furthermore, crowded apartments demand for fulfillment of basic nessecity and high consumption lead to lack access or shortage. As , large number of residents in one area put excessive pressure on water suplies and electricity seems to be the common elements people living in apartments could face. For example, High apartments when faced water shortage could get water for municipal tanks to fullfll the locals need.

In conclusion , Building apartment blocks in large cities may provide enough space for homes to live , whereas i disgaree bacause it could make locals suffer in needs and put negative effects on communal terms.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a clear position by saying, “I completely disagree,” and give two relevant reasons: possible social and psychological tension, and pressure on water and electricity supplies. These points address the topic, but they are only partially developed. The example about residents of different religions is difficult to follow and does not clearly show how tall buildings cause the problem; the water-shortage example is also unclear about how municipal tanks would solve the shortage. The response therefore presents relevant ideas but does not explain or support them sufficiently. The required minimum of 250 words is not met, which further limits the opportunity to develop your argument. Explain each reason with a clear cause-and-effect link and a specific, plausible example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting separate reasons, and a conclusion that restates your disagreement. “Furthermore” signals the second reason, and “In conclusion” makes the ending easy to identify. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and linking phrases are occasionally awkward or mechanical. For example, “For instance” introduces an example whose connection to the claim about mental challenges is not explained, while “As” at the start of the next paragraph leaves the relationship between the ideas unclear. Some references, such as “that” and “such locals,” are also difficult to interpret. Use clearer topic sentences and explain how each example supports its paragraph’s main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “overcrowded apartments,” “psychological tension,” “social bonds,” and “infrastructure,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear. “To reside the locals” is not a natural way to describe housing people, and “sharing good terms” does not express the intended outcome clearly. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “nessecity,” “suplies,” “fullfll,” and “disgaree.” These issues sometimes make the reader work to understand your points. Build a bank of accurate housing and urban-planning phrases, and check spelling and collocations carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a reason clause beginning “because” and a sentence starting “Those who…”. However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries can make the argument difficult to follow. For example, “Those who lives” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “a person is abide by rituals” has an incorrect verb construction. In “limits social bonds,” the subject does not agree with the plural subject earlier in the sentence. Punctuation and spacing around commas are also inconsistent. Practise building shorter, accurate sentences first, then combine ideas using correctly formed clauses and check each sentence for a clear subject and verb.

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