Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The only to provides enough homes in big cities constructing tall buildings is one and only solution becuse of many reasons which can not underestimated.

first of all world overall population is increasing at much higher level in recent decades.Secondly we don't have enough space for managing this crowed. So, the only solution is that providng homes to huge number of people an minimum space. We have brief evidence that in ninties decades when worlds population was least the number of tall buildings were also minimum.

Another important reason which can not be ignored is increasing number of different businesses.large commercial buidings are required for managing a specific business.

There are large number of housing societies present in big cities cover specifc space but that fully furnished houses can not be afford for a person who works as salary person and he choose a cheaper apartment with least benifits.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You take a clear position that tall buildings are the only solution, and you offer relevant points about population growth, limited space and affordability. However, the response addresses the question only minimally: the reasons are asserted rather than explained, and the example about the 1990s does not clearly demonstrate that tall apartment blocks are the best way to provide homes. The discussion of commercial buildings also shifts away from housing without showing how it supports your argument. The response is 149 words, so it does not meet the 250-word minimum. To strengthen your answer, explain how apartment blocks increase housing capacity, consider a limitation or alternative, and support each point with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: you introduce your position, use “first of all” and “secondly” to present reasons, and add another point about businesses and housing affordability. These signals help readers recognise that you are listing ideas. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the links between population growth, commercial buildings and affordable apartments are not explained. The response also lacks clear paragraphing, and the final sentence introduces a new point without a concluding summary. Develop one main idea per paragraph and use linking phrases to show cause, contrast or example rather than simply adding another point. This would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “population,” “space,” “commercial buildings,” “housing societies” and “apartment.” This gives the reader a general sense of the subject. However, the range is limited, and several spelling errors or imprecise expressions make parts of the argument harder to understand, such as “crowed,” “least benifits” and “salary person.” Some phrases are also unnatural or unclear, including “world overall population” and “managing a specific business.” Aim for accurate topic-specific terms and natural collocations, such as “urban population,” “limited land,” “affordable housing” and “low-income workers.” Proofreading spelling and choosing precise expressions will help you communicate your ideas more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a sentence beginning “So, the only solution is that…” and a relative clause in “a person who works…”. However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence construction, verb forms, articles and punctuation sometimes make meaning unclear. For example, “The only to provides enough homes… is one and only solution” has an incomplete and confused structure, while “that fully furnished houses can not be afford” contains an incorrect verb form. Several sentences also run together or lack appropriate capitalisation and punctuation. Practise building clear subject–verb sentences first, then add subordinate clauses accurately. Check verb forms and sentence boundaries carefully when proofreading.

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