Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays, cities are construct tall builtings, blocks and apartments for residens. In present years, our population is significantly enhance. In this way, it is essential to provide enouph homes for living. There are two sides positive and nagetive were explain this point.

On the one hand, the large building is enssential for individuals to living.For example, some individuals are migrate there home for transfored and moved in city there are they booked rented apartment for living. Constructing large blocks is positive impact for over population controlling.

On the other hand, it has nagetive on barren land. The government should object on extra bucontrolled be

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the general issue of housing in cities and mention a possible benefit of tall blocks: they can accommodate people moving to urban areas and help address population pressure. However, the response does not clearly answer whether you agree or disagree with the statement, and the promised discussion of positive and negative sides is not developed. The point about “barren land” and the government is incomplete, so the reader cannot understand your reasoning or see a relevant example explained. The response is also substantially below the required 250 words, leaving the task only minimally addressed. To improve, state your position directly, explain two or three relevant reasons, and support each with a specific example and a clear conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction and two contrasting body paragraphs, using “On the one hand” and “On the other hand.” These signals help the reader recognise a basic structure. However, progression within the paragraphs is limited: the first body paragraph moves from migration to renting and then population control without explaining how the points connect. The final paragraph ends abruptly at “extra bucontrolled be,” so the argument has no completed development or conclusion. Some linking is also awkward, as in “There are two sides positive and nagetive were explain this point.” Build each paragraph around one clear main idea, connect supporting details explicitly, and finish with a conclusion that restates your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “population,” “rented apartment,” “large blocks,” and “government,” so the general subject is recognisable. However, the range is narrow and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to interpret, such as “builtings,” “residens,” “enouph,” and “nagetive.” Phrases such as “population controlling” and “individuals are migrate” also show inaccurate word forms or collocations. The unfinished phrase “extra bucontrolled” further obscures meaning. Aim to learn topic vocabulary in accurate combinations, such as “housing demand,” “high-rise apartments,” and “urban population growth,” and check spelling and word forms before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response includes mostly short, simple statements, with an attempt at a more complex example beginning “For example.” Some basic sentence boundaries are present, but grammatical control is inconsistent and errors often make relationships between ideas unclear. For instance, “cities are construct” uses an incorrect verb form, while “individuals are migrate there home” has problems with verb structure and sentence construction. “There are they booked rented apartment” is also difficult to follow because the clauses and article use are not controlled. The final sentence is incomplete, and spacing around punctuation is inconsistent. Practise forming complete subject–verb sentences first, then add subordinate clauses accurately; check verb forms, articles, and sentence endings during revision.

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