Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In recenet years , the talk about provide enough homes in large cities we can build tall apartment blocks has become an debateable issue . some people belives that building tall apartments is the best way to provide enough home to the people in afforable price .Where some people dont belive they have their own thinking . As i belive building tall aparat is the best way to provide enough house .

Now a days we can see population of the world is increasing . cities are becoming more crowded.Everyone wants live a good life in the city .As populstion is increasing living of peoeple is change world become more modern . People like to live in the cities the area of cities become more congested . people have less space as land is becoming more quite and complex to live . their is the best way to adjest people like growing nation need to build tall apartment blocks which is very convinient and comfortable for everyone .

On the other hand , we see building tall apratments in the cities also effect our enviroment . where we are watching lots of changing as house in the tall apartments are congested . we are facing a lots of health issues . Also safety for each and every person is big factor . As land house we can experince better life fresh air and things are more better .

As a result of discussion we can say that where tall apartment house are good for socity and crowded cities . as time pass population also increase so we need to provide enough house for all the people who is moving to city for better life .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You state a position in the introduction—“building tall aparat is the best way”—and return to the need for housing in the conclusion. You also give relevant reasons, including population growth, limited urban land, environmental effects, health, and safety. However, the response only partly develops the question: it does not clearly explain why tall blocks are the best way compared with alternatives, and the opposing points are mentioned without being weighed against your position. Several claims, such as apartments being “convenient and comfortable” or causing health issues, need explanation or a specific example. Make your degree of agreement explicit and develop two or three reasons with clear supporting details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, and the second body paragraph signals a contrast with “On the other hand.” This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, the overall progression is not consistently clear: ideas about population growth, modern life, congestion, land, and apartment benefits are crowded together, while the environmental and safety points are not fully connected to the argument. Linking phrases such as “As a result of discussion” are awkward or do not clearly show the relationship between ideas, and “where” is repeatedly used in ways that make connections unclear. Organise each paragraph around one main point, then explain it and link it explicitly to your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “congested,” “population,” “environment,” and “safety,” and you try to express both advantages and disadvantages. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning difficult to follow, such as “land is becoming more quite and complex to live” and “living of people is change.” Spelling errors are also frequent, including “recenet,” “afforable,” “aparat,” and “enviroment,” which reduce clarity. Build a reliable set of topic phrases and check spelling and word forms carefully. For example, use “urban land is scarce” and “high-rise apartments can accommodate more residents” rather than the unclear phrases in the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences and use basic connectors to relate ideas, but sentence structures are limited and errors occur frequently, sometimes making the intended meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “some people belives,” “Everyone wants live,” and “population also increase,” where agreement or verb forms are incorrect. Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “has become an debateable issue” and the run-on opening sentence. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using clauses such as “because” and “although.” Check subject–verb agreement, infinitives after “want,” articles, and punctuation when editing.

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