Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It is often argued that give build a tall apartment block in large cities . i agree with this view because popullation increaing day by day and already build many socities in large cities.

one key reason why i agree with this opinion is that when apartment blocks construct in large cities its not consumed to much area. on this space we can buid significant places like health centers, educationat spots moreover playgrounds for make active and greate soceity.

another reason most of the peoles prefer to purches appartments. as a result,

In conclusion, i agree that the good way to provide big cities is to contruct the apartments blocks instant of houes .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear position in the opening—“i agree with this view”—and give a relevant reason: apartment blocks use less land, leaving space for facilities such as health centres and playgrounds. However, the response addresses the question only minimally. The second reason, that people prefer apartments, is not explained, and the sentence ends unfinished with “as a result,”. The conclusion repeats your agreement but does not develop the argument or give a specific example. The response is also 136 words below the required minimum, so there is not enough explanation or support to fully answer the task. Develop each reason with a clear explanation and a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation: you present your opinion, introduce two reasons with “one key reason” and “another reason,” and provide a concluding sentence. This gives the reader a simple outline of your response. However, progression is limited because the second body paragraph stops at “as a result,” and the conclusion largely repeats the introduction rather than drawing the ideas together. Connections between points are also unclear in places, particularly in the long sentence about using the saved space for facilities. Use complete paragraphs with one developed main idea each, and connect the explanation to its result explicitly. Completing the second reason would make the overall progression clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to housing and urban planning, including “apartment blocks,” “large cities,” “health centers,” and “playground.” These choices help communicate the general topic. However, the range is basic and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response difficult to understand, such as “popullation increaing,” “buid significant places,” and “educationat spots.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “make active and greate soceity” and “provide big cities.” Aim for accurate topic vocabulary and natural collocations, and check spelling carefully. For example, describe the facilities as supporting “a healthy community” rather than using the unclear phrase “make active and greate soceity.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt a few longer structures, including a reason clause beginning “because” and a conditional-style phrase, “when apartment blocks construct…”. However, the range is very limited, and frequent errors in sentence formation and verb forms sometimes obscure your meaning. For example, “when apartment blocks construct” needs a passive form such as “when apartment blocks are constructed,” while “it’s not consumed to much area” does not form a clear grammatical sentence. The opening also lacks a complete, accurate construction, and the final body paragraph is unfinished. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with clauses using “because,” “when,” and “as a result.”

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