Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is argued that the better option to provide enough homes to high range apartment buildings in big cities. This essay strongly agree with this statement because in tall apartment buildings has many apartment to live lots of people and other lands can be use for different works.

The key reason is that in a large builds has many apartments to live. Many people can live their with families and friends. People don't have to build individual builds or homes for individual families. As a result, other lands can be use for other purposes like industies or shopping malls. For example, country side people try for shift to big cities to build their career so they can live in tall apartment builds instead of building another one.

Another main reason is that in large apartment buildings live lot of families together. So, they can build a nice neighbourhood. As a consequence, they can help each other and learn different things from different persons. And also large buildings has lots of facilities like those building has good security and some has shopping malls or hospitals facilities. So, who live there they don't have to go outside for those facilities they can easily get them on their buildings.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You take a clear position in favour of tall apartment blocks and give two relevant reasons: they house many people on less land, and shared buildings may offer community and facilities. The example of people moving from the countryside to cities is also connected to the topic. However, the response is under the required 250 words, and this limits how fully you can explain and support your ideas. The second reason, in particular, lists possible benefits such as security, shops and hospitals without explaining how these make tall blocks the best way to provide enough homes. Develop each point with a specific example and briefly acknowledge a limitation or alternative before concluding your argument.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic, recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a progression from housing capacity to neighbourhood benefits. Linking phrases such as “As a result” and “For example” help show relationships between ideas. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and several links feel mechanical. In the second body paragraph, “So,” “As a consequence,” and “And also” introduce a series of claims without showing how each one supports the main argument. Some references, such as “those building” and “they,” are also unclear. Use a clear topic sentence for each paragraph, connect examples directly to the claim, and vary or reduce linking expressions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant terms, including “apartment buildings,” “individual families,” “neighbourhood,” and “facilities,” so the main topic is generally understandable. However, vocabulary is repetitive and often imprecise, which limits the clarity and flexibility of the argument. Phrases such as “better option to provide enough homes to high range apartment buildings” and “large builds” do not express the intended meaning naturally. There are also spelling errors, including “industies,” and repeated use of “buildings” where more precise alternatives would help. Build a wider range of housing and urban-planning vocabulary, and check spelling and collocations when revising.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, including a reason clause beginning “because” and a result clause beginning “so.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “This essay strongly agree” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “in tall apartment buildings has many apartment” lacks a clear grammatical subject and has incorrect number agreement. In “other lands can be use,” the passive verb form is incorrect. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, articles, plurals and passive forms. More accurate control of these basics will make your ideas easier to understand.

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