Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In cities tall buildings has become more popular among certain demographic group . the people also start claiming that providing enough homes for individuals is making crises in the cities and it also so hard to make houses for all people in the cities, so making tall apartment blocks is the best way to provide enough homes . this essay will argue why building tall apartment blocks should be made despite some potential risk .

People have always been wanted their own houses for a long time in the entire life. they also worry about it all the time because the life they have never led in their entire lifetime. So they ever transfer into the big cities they can have a modarate life . For example, thereis many people who are living outside the cities also want to come to the cities and led their life peacefully, Because they also wanted to feel the life inside the large cities. Everything in the large cities is starting to grow tall apartment and are making our cities crowded.

Despite the minor risks associated with making tall apartments the idea that they make cities busier completely preposterous.Tall appartment vast number of people altogether. So it makes room for another building so it have lots of people in one building. They prevented unwanted houses .For example unwanted houses are not necessary people who do not even live there so it can make space scare. Overall, The idea that to save space and provide enough houses for individuals who cant afford houses in the city.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response takes a broadly supportive position, saying tall apartment blocks are the best way to provide homes, and it gives a relevant point about accommodating many people in one building. However, the argument is only partially developed: the first body paragraph focuses on people wanting to move to cities rather than explaining how high-rise construction meets housing demand. The claim that tall buildings “make room for another building” and the example about “unwanted houses” are unclear, so they do not effectively support the position. The conclusion is also incomplete and does not clearly restate the answer. To strengthen the response, explain the benefits directly—such as using limited urban land efficiently—and develop a specific example, while acknowledging and evaluating a relevant drawback.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the essay into an introduction, two body paragraphs and a concluding statement, and phrases such as “For example” and “Despite” show an effort to connect ideas. However, progression is difficult to follow because several sentences do not clearly connect to the main argument. For instance, the discussion of people moving to cities shifts abruptly to cities becoming crowded, without explaining the relationship between these points and apartment blocks. The second body paragraph also moves from risks to space, then to unwanted houses, with unclear links. The final sentence reads as a fragment rather than a complete conclusion. Use one clear main idea per paragraph and connect each example explicitly to the claim it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some topic-related vocabulary, including “tall apartment blocks,” “large cities,” “provide enough homes” and “save space,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is basic and several inaccurate or unclear expressions make the argument harder to understand. “A moderate life” does not clearly express the intended benefit of city living, while “make space scare” appears to mean that space becomes scarce. There are also spelling and form errors, such as “modarate,” “appartment” and “thereis.” Aim for precise housing and urban-planning vocabulary, and check spelling and collocations. For example, describe high-rise buildings as “accommodating more residents” or “making efficient use of limited land,” rather than relying on repeated references to “making” houses.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The essay attempts both simple and longer sentence forms, including a contrastive opening to the second body paragraph and sentences beginning with “For example.” However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes obscure meaning. Examples include “In cities tall buildings has become” (subject–verb agreement), “People have always been wanted” (incorrect verb form), and “thereis many people” (agreement and sentence construction). Articles, plurals and punctuation are also inconsistently controlled, as in “Tall appartment vast number of people altogether” and “preposterous.Tall.” The final sentence beginning “Overall” is not a complete sentence. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses; proofread agreement, verb forms, sentence boundaries and punctuation.

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